Reviews of The Hero System
The Hero System
MellowGuy
- Overall Rate
- Writing Quality
- Updating Stability
- Story Development
- Character Design
- world background
Will be doing a serious review here. No spoilers. Okay, so what do we have here? A typical system novel? I don't think so. We have Jonah, a righteous mc that helps other. However, he is almost murdered. He then gains the Hero System from the future, starting his journey into an unknown world. Even though I'm the author, I must admit that this novel has a lot of potential. Cultivators... Two worlds... Disaster... System... Mission... I mean, damn, how did I even think of such an awesome novel? I always wonder. So here is what you'll get if you read this. 1. A reasonable MC. 2. A developing System (not overpowered) 3. Cultivators in a modern world. 4. Fantasy world. 5. Two bros in a foreign world. 6. Mc with a clear goal. 7. Side-characters with their own thoughts and feelings. 8. A bit of heroism philosophy. 9. And lastly, lots and lots of fun, thrill, and enjoyment. There are other exciting elements but that would just spoil it. At the very least, these are my goals for this novel. So... what are you waiting for?
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A GOOD JOB SO FAR... CAN'T BE RATED TOO HIGH OR LOW.. this work is not typical.. BUT EVERYONE ARE UNIQUE AND WE'VE SEEN A LOT OF UNIQUE..... IN A NUT: MC awakened a system after a 'fall' and the whole story proceeds like the webnovel 'THE GAMER' in an eastern fantasy setting that includes cultivation, spirit techniques and elves... it differs in the story and the character design..
hero,huh. pft hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha oh my god! hero in the cultivation world!?oh thats a riot!!đthere is no such thing.đthe only types of hero that exists in the cultivation world is dead menđ or manage to make it on time before something dastardly happens in a part of the world.what about the rest of the world ?hmm got no answer. kay thats normal.these are the hero types that exist bruh.realities a b!tch deal with it. to me there are no heroes only people who make it on time.
Super disappointed the author just abandoned this. I waited for 2 years hoping he would continue it, but he just started writing a new novel instead. After no updates for 2 years we just get an apology update chapter??! Sorry, I'm not interested in reading any of your new works. You could just disappear with no notice after I walk and grow with your main character. It's not nice to ghost people dude.
review: Writing Quality: i really need to complement you on that you are doing fantastic on that aspect. i like your writing style an you almost make no mistakes.(i myself haven't seen one yet but you are probably human so that is why you get an almost) Stability of Updates: i can't judge this because i haven't been following your novel for long but in the author notes i didn't see any apologies about being late so you are probably stable. Stability of Updates: the development till now is very good but for myself was the elven arc a bit too long in comparison to the rest of the story but it will probably dissapear as a problem when you have more chapters. so no complains here. Character Design: i don't really know how to judge this but for me it is sufficient. World Background: till now it is slowly getting revealed in a nice pace so no problems here this was my review, now hoping for a mass release.
Liking this novel so far, it provides a refreshing break from the arrogant protagonists of other novels, who are obsessed with face smacking or something, whilst also having a likeable MC and an interesting concept. Other characters could be developed a bit more though, as they seem to have no significance to the MC or the story right now.
Okay so. I have to admit this novels is very similar to what I read but different as well. But you know what I like it. So far the mc is being developed well along with the system. One thing I find repetitive a little is the people that try to go against the mc. First it was the guy talking about civilians as trash and now itâs the guy in the hive. I hope this doesnât repeat all the time. Someone goes agathrough not mc - mc beats said person. Otherwise the novel is great. Keep up the good workđ¤
I plan to write a review every 5 chapters or so if I keep reading, but here are my thoughts so far. To be honest I almost just dropped this at chapter 1, but looking in the reviews and seeing how the author asks for constructive criticism and meaningful feed back I decided to keep going and give it another shot. It got kinda better at chapter 5? The first few chapters were actually difficult to read because the sentence structure did not flow at all. It was sporadic and strange. Some lines are redundant and doesn't add anything to the story, rather they distract from the current events and seem like filler to add word count. The abundance of ****** sentence structure also makes it kind of boring to read, so maybe spice things up a bit? Maybe get a Beta reader and edit the earlier chapters, especially the first one. I'd assumed the first chapter to speak about the quality of the story as a whole, but the later chapters were a bit better so I hope this trend continues as I keep reading.
