TriggeredTurtle
An OP MC who seem to know too much and getting on everyone’s nerves with his attitudes ; mind you, this is just a little kid giving a ****ty attitude to everyone. I wouldn’t blame any of the other characters wanting to wipe him and his clan out of existence. Seems the story is like parents/guardians of this clan trying to raise and protect this little asswipe and all he does is cause trouble. Reading this story has been boring and the OP MC just makes you want to turn him over your knee to spank him. Not really much development in this story also pretty dry
Utter fucking trash, The Only Advice for you is don't read it, DON'T FUCKING EVEN BOTHERING TO READ IT, this is the first time i made a useless review, even trashy novels get better review from me with constructive criticism, I'm chapter 25+ expecting the main character to grow up just a tiny bit, but the progress is so fucking slow that it's killing me, HE'S RETARDED NOT CHILDISH , Since even if i search the whole universe the only way i could found one would be if they have mental disabilities.
*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* Constructive Criticism: The constant multiple scene changes within a single chapter are confusing (speaking of POV's). I don't understand the world at all. I can see the intention and potential of the plot and characters, but also see a lack of depth and follow through on those. Positive Feedback: Good character and story ideas. Also, Seems like you are keeping to the post rate you promised. Only spotted one grammar error. Personal Feedback: Good ideas with a ad execution, my apologies, but I will not be continuing this novel. I hope you continue for those who enjoy your book, I just can't enjoy a book that seems like the author was just trying to rush all their ideas (not rush through the story...the story is actually quite slow... It just feels like the story making process was rushed)
Well there nothing much to review here but u know i like mc but u can make it lighter if u not put the twise too much in the beginning, i think if u put there then itll be very long story but that good if u can make daily release... I'll gave u these score but they aren't final so keep improve i like ur story
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MC will range from 1-5 years old throughout these chapters. I don't know if we'll have any more time skips but a little boy for an MC is a terrible choice. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------His birth family gave him a drop of Ancient Phoenix blood, sent him from the Highest God Realm to the Lowest Mortal Realm to hide away and grow stronger. ----------------------------------------------------------------His new adopted family is royalty. Mom is Empress Bing and dad is the King. His brother is the crown prince and sister is a genius. The Empress, King and Crown Prince were about to die when the void opened up, a baby came out and just by crying, he killed the pursuers--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------'xxxxxx----------After that, he was brought back to the kingdom. After his new parents discovered his abilities, Empress Bing faked her own death, took the boy and hide away in her clan, far away to protect the boy even more-------------------------'---------------------------------'------------------------------------------------------------------------------MC can talk at one. Just follow people around, annoyingly and has quite a bad mouth to everyone. He has an age ceremony at 5, awakens the fire attribute at the unknown rank. Of course, the Clan head says rank 1 to protect him........#----------------------------------- ---------------------#--##----------------------------##-#-MC has a future gf Nina from another clan. He was killed, but came back to life. He has to kill that evil Rose girl one day. Rose's older sister is Lily, a nice girl and was friends with MC. She didn't give up any info on Rose's whereabouts------------------------------------------------------------- ----------------#------------------------------------MC's family makes Lily his new slave for life, ssigning a soul pact. The BS part is that her cultivation jumps two realms instantly & she can also revive when she dies (if MC wants it). MC got no powerup. MC is still just 5, but a very arrogant person and very perverse, the exact opposite of what you usually see from a so called Phoenix Bloodline.
very good, I just think (World Background) was very big (low, medium and high mortal plane) and (low, medium and high god plane) and (immortal plane, I want to think it's only 1). Other than that, I really liked the characters and their interaction. Shot one of the best original xianhuan series of the site, congratulations
Great story and all. But the age of the MC makes people hate him. How can a toddler be so lustful and the women who try seduce a little child like that is disgusting not entertaining. If you changed the age of the MC to around 12 then it would be more understandable not a little toddler under 2ft bossing around old men
Well as proofreader and editor least to say I´m pro novel xD But as reader myself I think the story has grat potential, it´s the authors first novel so well things always start from somewhere and I think with time will only get better. As for now well MC is still a child, and as we all now which child hasn´t thrown a tantrum or behaves like a little shithead ^^ I love the way the MC is and I can´t w8 how he will develop growing up .....like maybe fall in love, making friends, loosing familymember, remember past, getting knowled about his real human parents , etc.....so let´s ride the bus and hope for a good journey :D! Author-san keep up the creative work, don´t go dying on me because of exhaustion :P
I'm only on the third chapter yet I already feel excitement. If that happens, this book definitely deserves a 5! There are still a small amount of fragments in the grammar after being proofread by SpacePhoenix, but still did an amazing job! Thank you author and SpacePhoenix! Is that good enough you 140 Character need?!?!?!?????
Feels like a sketch and not a story, idea 5/5, execution 2/5. Feels like a sitcom. Passed me a quick few hours reading through the available chapters. Protagonist could kill high level assassins with a wail when he was just born on chapter 1 but was absolutely "useless" for the next 35~ chapters. This story feels more like a release of frustration through writing than a properly thought through novel.