Reviews of Born as a Sage in Naruto World
Born as a Sage in Naruto World
NiksElDrago
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IN A NUT: a pathetic guy born into a new(KIGEN bloodline, which has the potential to go OP) bloodline WITHOUT THE MEMORIES OF PAST, but a SYSTEM that can lead him to the peak of OP-iness!!! REVIEW: Story development and the world background completely blends in, with writing quality that suits your taste and a steady update for dessert... As for MC he is pretty normal(no revenge, no world domination.. etc YET) for a genius.
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First let's start of with the title. Your title is missing 'the' before Naruto World. Then again, I don't really like your title. You really need an editor or a proofreader. There are so many missing words everywhere. I get that you're using a system similar to The Gamer, but your stats and levels are completely meaningless. There is nothing to compare the values of the mc to. What is 60 str in the your story? Would it be comparable to the average Chunin or Jonin? What do the levels mean? How would you quanitify the Hokage's strength in levels? What is the MC's level as compared to the Hokage? And you need to work on showing and not telling as much. You need to show us what he is doing and not just summarize a time period. This is a very common problem here, on royalroadl and other webnovel hosting sites. And you need more interaction between characters in your story. Just a few things you can work on.
Just starting the story and I'm noticing what seems like plagiarism. There are bits that were exactly the same as the first chapter of Ninja Gamer By: DragonKnightRyu. I'm guessing the author isn't the same person because English doesn't seem like their first language. I'm guessing this is Jugo's clan. There's no way that a clan like this would just be farmers, until they're wiped out, if they live in the Naruto world. Maybe if it specifically mention that they're peace loving. I don't really like the level up stat gains from his clan because they don't make sense. It feels like the author is trying to balance the world by giving them, and presumably every ninja clan, only 6 stat gains. Real life doesn't need to be balanced. The Uchiha clan shouldn't get the same gains as the Yamanaka clan. They're superior. This Kigen no chie clan should be getting a lot of vitality stats if the natural energy is increasing their lifespans and such. The death scene didn't make sense to me. How do you tackle someone and jump out of a train? Did he go through a window? Did he overpower him and drag him towards a door? How did he do all of this without the guy blowing himself up? Why would you hijack a carriage of a train if you're a suicide bomber instead of just blowing yourself up? If you're a suicide bomber you would probably act immediately unless you also have another weapon and are trying to cause more damage.
Pure idiocy! This novel is literally... ugh! A 1 year old baby speaking like an old man and the grown ups doesnt even think its weird! System status, skills, and whatnot takes literally almost 1/2 of the chapter and moreover, this kid can even make logical speeches that takes soo long. Aargghh! There’s just too many flaws in this novel that i cant put it all. Its utterly boring that i dropped at chapter 12.
Too OP too fast Most annoying is, as 1 or 3 years old speaks like an old man -not exactly, js just nobody speaks like that. not 3 years old.( keep your purity, the darkness corruption of the world shant stain you, says the 3 years old, the wise old man, mature beyond age, the showofff... riddicilius. could have said, for you(it was gift giving event). and done.) And The Gamer system stuff is too much in my opinion. Isekai... is isekai Reached chapter 10 Disappointing, boring, overrated.
great story my favorite original by far the unique skills and original character you made are fantastic even down to the clothes you made for him i love everything about it so far my only problem is i am getting tired of people making op kids that are far stronger then their age he even outclasses itachi and kakashi getting to jonin by large margin like 5 or 6 years but it still deserves full score cant wait for more
Definitely the kind of story that'll give you carpel-tunnel in your F5 finger. While a Naruto fan-fiction is mostly blah, this one really proves to be an exception to the rule. The world-building and character/story design are Very original and addictive. I don't think anyone else could've pulled off adding a new bloodline into the original story. The MC reincarnates with a system into the Naruto world with no memories and ends up born to become a sage bloodline of his own with future OPness definitely incoming judging by the chapters so far. If you're looking for a story that makes you agonize for more updates and want to constantly want to re-read and binge it then this story is definitely for you.
