King_of_Crowns
The world in this story becomes more and more deep and interesting as it goes on. It draws you in from the beginning but keeps you reading. There are some slow chapters but it pays off hugely as the story develops. It's exciting and well-built. Also the characters aren't just pawns, they all seem to have their own motivations and are complex in their own right which makes their interactions all the more enticing. The clear critique is that there are slow chapters, but if all the chapters tried to be exciting without giving room for development, it may become less impactful when things pay off. So I'm fine with those chapters.
What I have gathered from reading this first few chapters is as follows. The writing quality is quite high and the story development is extremely strong. However, as is the case with most original novels on Qidian, the story flows too fast, not leaving enough time for the reader to take it all in through the large paragraphs of information. Hence I suggest making your paragraphs smaller. The character design could use a little improvement, mainly in the sense of increasing the back stories of the various characters . But the world background is also quite good and fairly fleshed out. Good job if this is your first novel, I'll be favouriting this one.
I really like the story so far. The characters are also pretty good. I really like stories that have a lot of strategy in them so I'm exicted to see how that will play out in this story. The only problem I have is how small the stakes are for the MC. Becoming the student council president isn't a huge goal. If however he was doing with real life impact, I think it would be a lot more fun.
Hi - this is the author with a quick review. When I started writing this story I wanted to write something that was deep and impactful. I didn't want to just write a quick web story to get out an idea - but I wanted to make something that could stand on its own and that I would come back to after many years an still be proud of. So in this story - expect there to be a detailed and hopefully thrilling ride with characters you'll love, hate and fear. Please let me know what you think with a review and comments - thanks for reading!