Yuan Dans Cultivation, Wen Shuangqiang,I recommend Return to the Immortal World. The author sends thoughts in a quiet night. This was an urban supernatural novel. The protagonist was originally a big shot in the immortal world. After his soul was scattered, a wisp of his soul returned to his original body on Earth. Ten thousand years in the Immortal World, only one year had passed on Earth. Although the main character looked weak, developed slowly, and was not decisive in his relationships, he had the knowledge and mental cultivation methods of the immortal world. He was definitely not ordinary. This book was rated as a four-star. Some people felt that the idea was wonderful but the content was not exciting enough. The early stages were good, and the later stages were slow. There were also many typos and the emotional scenes were pale. However, it was still a good book for the famine. It was a typical urban immortal cultivation novel with elements such as posturing and slapping faces. Friends who liked this kind of novel could read it. In addition, the protagonist in the book was betrayed by a trusted friend. After returning to Earth, he accumulated strength and prepared to fight his way back to the immortal world. It was also very interesting. In short, there were good and bad things about this book, but it was worth reading.
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The sickly son wants to correct the novelIf he wanted to correct the novel, the following were some possible directions:
* * 1. Plot **
1. * * Strengthens the logic of the plot **
- In the opening part of the story, for example, the female lead was a housewife, and her husband was a programmer. The couple's relationship was not good. This could further explain the root of the couple's bad relationship, not just because her husband worked overtime. For example, he could dig into the differences in personality and family values to make the plot development more reasonable.
- As for the scene of her best friend's son behaving like a spoiled child, she needed to add some foundation. It could be described from the environment in which his best friend's son grew up, family relationships, or psychological trauma to explain why he had such a special hobby, rather than suddenly having his hand quietly move to the female lead.
2. * * Plot rhythm adjustment **
- The plot at the beginning of the story developed slowly, but it could speed up the pace and quickly introduce the core conflict of the story. For example, after introducing the basic relationship between the characters, he would quickly enter into the series of contradictions caused by the son's sickly behavior, instead of describing the dull life of the female protagonist and the housewife.
- In the subsequent plot, he had to avoid dragging the plot out. If he wanted to develop the plot of the female protagonist dealing with the sickly behavior of her best friend's son, he could add more exciting plot elements, such as the female protagonist's struggle, resistance, and the reactions of the people around her.
3. * * Increase the richness of the plot **
- Other than the plot line of the female lead and her best friend's son, he could add some supplementary plots. For example, the attitude and reaction of the female protagonist's husband when he discovered his wife's abnormality, or the change in the relationship between the female protagonist and her best friend because of this incident, which made the whole story more complete.
- For the role of the sickly son, he could add more monologues or memories to show the process of his sickly character formation, not just through his actions.
* * 2. Character Creation **
1. * * Female Lead Image Creation **
- At present, the female lead was just an ordinary housewife, which could give her more personality characteristics. For example, she could have her own principles and bottom line. When faced with the inappropriate behavior of her best friend's son, she could not only feel afraid, but also have more positive countermeasures, such as direct questioning, warning, etc., to make her image more three-dimensional.
- In order to make the female lead's image more voluptuous, she could increase the influence of her past experiences on her current behavior. For example, whether she had experienced similar border violation when she was young would affect the way she reacted to her best friend's son's behavior.
2. * * Sick son image creation **
- At present, the image of the sickly son was relatively thin, mainly through his possessive behavior and thoughts to reflect the sickly characteristics. It could be used to describe the relationship between his appearance and his personality, such as how his eyes, expressions, and other details reflected his inner illness.
- Set up some unique hobbies or habits for him. These hobbies and habits can be related to his sickly behavior. For example, he liked to collect certain items, and these items had some symbolic meaning to his possessiveness towards the female lead.
3. * * Other Character Creation **
- As for the female protagonist's husband, although he was only a background character at the moment, he could increase his screen time and make his image more than just a busy programmer. For example, when the female protagonist was in trouble, he could find the problem from his point of view and take action. This could also become a new turning point in the development of the story.
- The female protagonist's best friend could also be described more. Her understanding of her son and her attitude after her son's sickly behavior could enrich the characters in the story.
* * 3. Writing style **
1. * * Description Technique improved **
- When describing the appearance and psychology of a character, more vivid descriptions could be used. For example, when describing the appearance of a sickly son, not only did he simply describe his eyes, Adam's apple, etc., he could also use metaphor, personification, and other rhetorical techniques to make the description more vivid.
- When describing a character's psychology, he could use a more delicate brush stroke. For example, when the female protagonist faced the behavior of her best friend's son, her inner fears, doubts, struggles, and other emotions could be expressed through more psychological descriptions, rather than simply brushing them off.
2. * * Language and style adjustment **
- If the current language style is relatively dull, you can add some influential words and sentences. When describing a tense plot, use some fast-paced, tension-filled sentences to enhance the tension of the story.
- By reducing some of the more ordinary and mediocre expressions, the language of the entire novel became more refined and vivid. For example, when describing a character's conversation, he could design a more personal conversation according to the character's personality.
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