One way is to really develop the characters' motives. For example, show in detail why the marauders would go as far as to kill Snape. Maybe there are some misunderstandings or deeper rivalries that haven't been fully explored in the original. Another aspect could be to add more magical elements. Instead of just a simple fight, introduce some unique spells or magical artifacts that play a role in the encounter. This would make the story more exciting and unpredictable.
Well, to make it more engaging, you could focus on the emotional aspects. Explore Snape's thoughts and feelings as he faces the marauders. Does he have any regrets? Is there something he wishes he could have done differently? And for the marauders, show their internal conflicts. Maybe some of them are hesitant about killing Snape but are pressured by the group. Also, a great setting can enhance the story. A dark, spooky location like an abandoned wizarding castle or a haunted forest would add to the atmosphere.
One plot twist might be that Snape has a secret weapon or power that he reveals at the last moment. For example, he could have a powerful protective charm that not only saves his life but also turns the situation around, making the marauders the ones in danger. Or perhaps there is a prophecy involved that the marauders were unaware of, and by trying to kill Snape, they are actually setting in motion a chain of events that will lead to their own downfall.
One way it could happen is if Hermione discovers a time - turning device in the Marauders' era. She might use her advanced knowledge to figure out that Snape is in danger. For example, she could know about some plot by the Marauders to prank Snape in a way that could turn deadly. She then steps in, using her magic skills and intelligence to prevent the harm. Maybe she creates a diversion or uses a protection spell to shield Snape.
In some fanfiction, Snape's greasy hair might be related to shampoo in a comical way. The Marauders could be the ones making fun of his hair and lack of proper shampoo use. Maybe they play a prank involving shampoo on Snape.
You can add some mystery, like not revealing who the father is right away. This will keep readers guessing. Also, include some emotional turmoil, like Gwen's fear of being a good mother. Drama always makes a story more engaging.
One way is to create complex characters. For example, give them conflicting motives and desires. If a character in a drama story wants to be rich but also values honesty, it creates an internal struggle that draws the audience in. Another way is to have a strong plot twist. Just when the audience thinks they know what's going to happen, something completely unexpected occurs, like the hero turning out to be the villain all along.
He is often very suspicious. He might immediately think it's some kind of trick by the Marauders or their descendants. He'll likely try to figure out how to use it to his advantage against those he dislikes.
Involving other characters in an interesting way can make it more engaging. Maybe there's a character who is trying to understand what the baby is experiencing during hypnosis. They could be an older sibling or a parent. Their reactions and attempts to communicate with the baby can add depth to the story. Also, creating a sense of mystery around the hypnosis itself, like not revealing all at once why the baby was hypnotized or what the full extent of its effects are, can keep the readers hooked.
Adding a lot of vivid descriptions. For example, if the story is set in a forest, describe the lush greenery, the sounds of the animals, and the smell of the damp earth. This makes the setting more real for the readers.
Adding vivid descriptions of the emotions involved can make it more engaging. For example, describe the mother's fear, the father's anxiety.
To make a 'Naruto is heartbroken' fanfiction more engaging, focus on his emotions deeply. Describe how his heartbreak affects his daily life, like he might stop eating or training. Also, add some flashbacks to happier times to contrast with his current state.