Use dialogue effectively. The way family members talk to each other can show the discipline in action. Old - fashioned language and slang from the Old West can add authenticity. For example, a father saying 'You'll not shirk your duties, young'un, or there'll be hell to pay' shows a no - nonsense approach to discipline. Also, introduce moral dilemmas related to discipline. Should a family member be punished severely for a small mistake in a dangerous situation? This will keep readers hooked.
Incorporate historical events. If the fanfiction is set during a time of gold rush or a range war, the family's discipline can be affected by these events. It gives more depth to the story. For instance, if the family is short on supplies during a range war, discipline might be stricter regarding food rationing. Moreover, develop strong characters with distinct personalities. A strict father with a soft heart or a rebellious child who eventually learns the importance of discipline can make the story engaging.
One way to make it more engaging is through dialogue. Have the characters talk to each other before and after the spanking. The adult could plead their case, and the disciplinarian could explain why the spanking is necessary. Also, include the inner thoughts of the characters. Let the reader know what the adult is thinking as they are over the knee, like how they are regretting their actions. And use vivid language to describe the physical act of spanking, but not in a too - graphic way.
Another theme might be the role of the family patriarch or matriarch in dispensing discipline. In the Old West, the head of the family had a great deal of authority. In fanfictions, they could be shown making tough decisions about family members' behavior. For instance, if a young family member was being disrespectful to elders, the patriarch might send them to live and work on a distant relative's ranch for a period to teach them respect.
Add some mystery. For example, in the family reunion story, there could be a long - lost heirloom that surfaces during the reunion, and the family members have to figure out its significance. This adds an element of intrigue.
Involving other characters in an interesting way can make it more engaging. Maybe there's a character who is trying to understand what the baby is experiencing during hypnosis. They could be an older sibling or a parent. Their reactions and attempts to communicate with the baby can add depth to the story. Also, creating a sense of mystery around the hypnosis itself, like not revealing all at once why the baby was hypnotized or what the full extent of its effects are, can keep the readers hooked.
Adding a lot of vivid descriptions. For example, if the story is set in a forest, describe the lush greenery, the sounds of the animals, and the smell of the damp earth. This makes the setting more real for the readers.
Adding vivid descriptions of the emotions involved can make it more engaging. For example, describe the mother's fear, the father's anxiety.
To make a 'Naruto is heartbroken' fanfiction more engaging, focus on his emotions deeply. Describe how his heartbreak affects his daily life, like he might stop eating or training. Also, add some flashbacks to happier times to contrast with his current state.
By developing strong characters. Make Gamzee's character multi - dimensional, with his own hopes, fears and quirks. Also, create interesting antagonists if there are any involved in the abuse situation.
One way is to add a touch of mystery. For example, the reason for the body swap could be a mysterious spell or an unknown scientific experiment gone wrong. This would keep the readers hooked as they try to figure out how and why it happened.
Add some mystery. For example, after the kiss, Merlin starts to have strange visions related to Arthur's future. This will keep the readers hooked as they try to figure out what these visions mean and how they are related to the kiss.