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This is my first time writing a novel, and I'm offering you a chapter. Please give me your opinions.

2024-09-13 19:48
Time passed in a flash. The originally clear sky was replaced by the night sky. This meant that the day was coming to an end. The night on Mount Redpine was quiet. Other than the rustling of the wind in the forest and the cries of some nighttime animals, there was nothing else. In the mountain forest, a thatched cottage that looked simple but was comfortable on the inside was still faintly flickering with candlelight. Fu Tianlin, who had been practicing for a day, lay on the bed in the thatched cottage. His entire body was sore. He was indeed exhausted today! It took him more than an hour to even finish dinner. The hand holding the chopsticks kept shaking without listening to his instructions. It was difficult for him to pick up a piece of food or eat a piece of rice. After dinner, he lay down on a simple bed that was made of wooden planks and covered with a layer of straw. On the straw was a layer of quilt as a mattress. He tried his best to relax, relax, and relax until he fell asleep unknowingly. His weak breathing sounded rhythmically. His small mouth was slightly open. His saliva slowly flowed out bit by bit. This was the state he was in after he fell asleep! Li Shen softened his footsteps and walked to the bedside to sit down slowly. Every movement of his was very light. He sat quietly at the side and looked at Fu Tianlin, who was sleeping soundly. His eyes revealed love, just like a father looking at his sleeping child. He stretched out his calloused hand and gently helped Fu Tianlin tidy up his slightly long bangs. He thought to himself,"If my child was still alive, he should be that old, right?" Just as Li Shen was immersed in his thoughts, a middle-aged man dressed in black brocade stood outside the door. The middle-aged man had arrived without a sound as if he had appeared out of thin air. The middle-aged man's appearance pulled Li Shen back from his thoughts. Li Shen turned to look at the middle-aged man without any surprise in his eyes, as if he had already known about the middle-aged man's sudden appearance. He said calmly,"You're here." The middle-aged man nodded in response. He looked at the sleeping Fu Tianlin and asked,"Is he asleep?”. " Yes, he's exhausted today. He's sleeping soundly," Li Shen said kindly as he looked at Fu Tianlin who was sleeping soundly. The middle-aged man looked at the sleeping Fu Tianlin and said with a smile,"It seems that his body is much better. His face is much ruddy compared to when I sent him here!" "That's right. This child's physique is good. Coupled with the prescription given by the living Yama, he recovered very quickly…By the way, how's your investigation going?" The middle-aged man did not respond. He first looked at Fu Tianlin and then said to Li Shen,"Let's talk outside." Don't let the child hear you!" The two of them walked to the open space outside the thatched cottage. The stars in the sky, the chirping of crickets, and the gentle breeze from the mountains made them feel extremely comfortable. The middle-aged man also felt a sense of comfort unconsciously. He muttered," No wonder you chose to settle down here. This is indeed a good place!" "Yeah, this place is far away from worldly disputes. It's very suitable for people like me to grow old here," said Li Shen. The middle-aged man smiled when he heard this. The world-famous Sea Shaking Saber wants to retire?" "One Blade Shakes the Ocean?" Li Shen said with a bitter smile. I can't accept this title anymore. I'm just a person waiting to die, no matter how resounding the title is, it's just empty talk to me." The middle-aged man smiled bitterly at Li Shen's self-mockery. Back then, the " One Saber Shakes the Ocean " who single-handedly defeated the Eighteenth Horse Gang on the Shahama Ancient Road had now become a person who lived alone in the mountains and waited for death all day long…Hehe…How sad… "Aren't you lonely here?" asked the middle-aged man. Other than you, the entire mountain... There shouldn't be anyone else, right?" "There used to be a group of bandits here who robbed people. Later, they all moved to a place where no one could find them," Li Shen said indifferently. The middle-aged man smiled and said,"It seems that even the bandits don't want to be neighbors with you." Li Shen was used to the middle-aged man's mockery. If he really got up that day…Li Shen was not used to it. Li Shen did not have many friends who could joke with him without making him angry. He was the only one. "When will you start practicing?" asked Li Shen. We've known each other for more than ten years, but you haven't changed at all. You're still as annoying as ever." The middle-aged man laughed and said," I can't change it. It's easy to change mountains and rivers, but it's hard to change one's nature. I might not be able to change even in my coffin." Li Shen agreed with the middle-aged man's words. If he really changed, then there would be one less interesting " bastard " in the martial arts world. That would be too boring. "Did you discover anything when you went to Rui Lin Manor?" Li Shen asked. Who did this?" The middle-aged man said seriously," When I got there, the entire manor was in a sea of fire. The fire burned for a day and a night. It was only when it rained heavily in the early morning that the fire was extinguished. Everything in the manor was turned into scorched earth. Many of the people inside were charred. I couldn't recognize their faces." As he spoke, the middle-aged man's eyes revealed a touch of sadness... "In other words, we can't find any clues?" asked Li Shen. "Not really, because I didn't find that person's body among the dead bodies," said the middle-aged man. "Who is it?" asked Li Shen. The middle-aged man replied,"Rui Lin Villa, Vice Head of Guard Zhang Biao." "Are you suspecting that he did it?" asked Li Shen. The middle-aged man said,"He doesn't have that ability. Even if he tied up five Zhang Biaos, he wouldn't be Fu Yuheng's opponent. But I suspect that he was the one who let those people into the villa." "Oh?" Li Shen asked,"Where did you see that?" Even if he didn't die in the villa, he could have died somewhere else. It might have been burnt. Didn't you recognize it?" "Impossible!" the middle-aged man said. When I searched Green Peace Mountain for Tian Lin, I couldn't find Zhang Biao's body or corpse. Moreover, Zhang Biao was known as a one-legged tiger in the martial world. His left leg was broken. It was the head of the Godly Axe Sect, Zuo Qian, who helped him install a mechanical leg. That was why he could walk like an ordinary person. Therefore, if he was burnt, it would be easy to recognize him."
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2024-09-14 00:13

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I'm writing the beginning of the novel. Please give me your opinions and criticism. I'm very grateful.

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2025-03-01 05:29

It was important to write the beginning of a novel to attract the attention of the readers and make them want to continue reading. If the beginning of the novel was not good enough, the reader might give up instead of wanting to continue reading. So I'm happy to help and accept criticism. A good beginning of a novel should have the following characteristics: 1. Enthralling plot: The beginning of the novel should be able to attract the interest of the readers and make them want to know more. If the plot was not attractive enough, the reader might give up instead of wanting to continue reading. 2. Clear character image: The beginning of the novel should be able to create a clear character image to let the reader have a preliminary understanding of the protagonist. If the character image was not clear enough, the reader might not know who the protagonist was and give up reading. 3. Clear and concise language: The beginning of the novel should be clear and concise so that the reader can quickly understand the theme and plot of the novel. If the language was too cumbersome, the readers might lose interest.

Excuse me, I'm writing a novel, and there's such a plot in the novel. Please help me give your opinions.

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2025-02-26 05:34

When you asked this question, I could feel your creativity and anticipation. In many novels, plots and characters had such settings. Here are my suggestions for this plot: First of all, I think this plot can bring about a strong emotional intersection, such as the love between the protagonist and his daughter, or the concern and commitment of the two people to each other. Such a plot could promote the development of the story and the character's personality. Secondly, you can consider a more in-depth description of the two main characters, such as the appearance, personality and background of the main character, or a more in-depth description of the daughter's character to make her more valuable and attractive. This way, the protagonist and his daughter would be more immersive, and the readers would be able to understand the development and plot of the story more easily. In addition, you can consider setting up different characters for the two main characters to make their performance and behavior more distinct and distinct. This would make the story more interesting and attractive. Finally, you can consider making a sudden move at the climax of the story to make the two main characters make unexpected decisions and actions. This will make the story more tense and attractive. In short, I think this plot can bring a lot of benefits. As long as you can deeply describe the two characters of the main characters and make their performance and behavior more vivid and interesting, it can make the story more attractive and moving.

Find a novel, please give me your opinions.

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2024-09-22 18:38

Alright, I can recommend a novel for you. What type do you want? Is it fantasy, science fiction, romance, or some other type of novel?

I'm writing a novel myself. Please come and give me your opinions or precautions. By the way, provide your favorite plot.

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2025-03-04 18:36

Writing a novel was a very interesting and challenging task. Before you start writing, it is recommended to spend some time thinking about the storyline and characters to ensure that they have enough depth and appeal to attract the reader's attention. Pay attention to the following points in the writing process: 1. Story structure: Make sure the story has a clear structure, including the beginning, development, climax, and ending. It allowed the reader to easily follow the storyline to understand the character's actions and decisions. 2. Character Creation: Create a real and profound image for the characters so that the readers can truly understand and feel their emotions and motives. Plot Design: Design an interesting and fascinating plot that makes the reader want to continue reading and explore more details of the story. Use of Language: Use concise and powerful language to allow the reader to understand the story and the actions of the characters. At the same time, pay attention to the language style and tone to let the readers feel the emotions and atmosphere of the story. Everyone had their own preferences regarding the plots they liked. Here are some of the possible popular plots: Science fiction: Science fiction usually contains interesting and fascinating storylines that explore the future and the possibilities of technology. 2. Horror novels: Horror novels usually contain tense and disturbing plots that make readers feel fear and threat. 3. Romance novels: Romance novels usually contain interesting and emotional characters and romantic plots to make readers feel love and romance. 4. Historical novels: Historical novels usually contain real and interesting historical events, characters, and plots to let readers feel the charm of history and culture.

I want to write a novel, please give me your opinions.

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2025-03-06 21:40

Writing a novel was an interesting thing, but it was also a process that required constant trial and error. Here are some factors to consider when writing a novel: 1. Story theme: First of all, you have to determine the theme and plot of the story. This can help you better construct the story world and characters. Character Creation: Character is the soul of the story. You need to create a series of characters with depth and personality so that readers can understand their inner world. 3. Plot setting: The plot is the core of the story. You need to design a series of coherent plots so that the reader can follow the story. 4. Rhythm control: Rhythm control is the key to the development of the story. You need to guide the reader's interest through the change of rhythm. 5. Use of language: The use of language is an important part of the novel. You need to use appropriate vocabulary and sentence patterns to make the language vivid, vivid and infectious. 6. Revise and edit: After you finish writing your novel, you need to revise and edit it to check for errors in grammar, spellings, and punctuations. You also need to ensure that the story is logical and coherent. I hope these suggestions can help you write a good novel.

I want to write a novel, please give me your opinions!

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2025-03-06 07:54

Writing a novel was an interesting thing. If he could write a good work, it would be very valuable. Before writing a novel, you can first consider some basic questions such as: What kind of novel do you want to write? Is it science fiction, fantasy, romance, or some other genre of novel? What is the theme and plot of the novel? What kind of message or emotion do you want to convey through the novel? What is the structure and style of the novel? What kind of narrative technique, language style, and background setting did he want to use? Who is the audience of the novel? What kind of readers do you want to attract? These questions could help to better conceive the novel and determine its characteristics and style. In the process of writing, he could improve the quality of his novel by constantly revising and improving it. You can ask friends or family for feedback or use the editing function in the writing software to modify sentences and passages. Writing is a job that requires patience and perseverance, but if you persevere, you will eventually be able to write an excellent novel.

I'm looking for fantasy novels urgently ~ Please give me your opinions, old bookworms!

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2024-09-02 14:07

Okay, what kind of fantasy novels do you like? For example, fantasy, science fiction, martial arts, and so on.

The first paragraph of the novel that I'm writing is to give some opinions and welcome criticism. I'll be grateful if you tell me more about your shortcomings.

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2024-09-13 01:24

When you hear this voice, you're already sucked in by a powerful force. This voice makes you feel uneasy but also curious. You begin to explore this mysterious place and discover that it comes from an unfamiliar planet. Everything on this planet will amaze you. Its sky was a deep blue light, shining with ever-changing colors. There were countless strange creatures on the ground. Their faces had unique body shapes, faces, and mouths. You also saw a huge invisible creature that seemed to be related to your actions, always pushing and blocking you from behind. When you finally find a quiet place, you meet a mysterious human. He tells you that there are many future and mysterious things inside this planet, but he won't tell you the truth. He tells you that you need to find a specific item to return to your family from this planet. You begin to explore this planet in hopes of finding this item. When you finally find this item, you feel a huge force pulling you into a new world.

I want to write a novel that transmigrated into an anime. Please give me your opinions.

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2025-03-03 23:07

There were a few points to note when writing a novel that transmigrated into an anime: 1. Decide on the type and background of the anime to be written, such as the time and character settings of the anime. 2. Decide on the theme and plot of the story, such as what kind of emotions or thoughts you want to express. 3. Decide on how to shape the characters, including the protagonist, supporting characters, and villains, how to let them develop and grow, and how to integrate their own style and characteristics into the animation. 4. Think about how to integrate your own culture and background into the world of animation and how to make the characters and the world match your own story background. 5. Confirm the structure and rhythm of the novel, including the ups and downs of the plot and the development and growth of the characters. 6. Consider how to make the novel readable and attractive, including the use of language, the idea of the plot, and the creation of the characters. I hope the above points will be helpful. I wish you a wonderful novel!

If you want to write a novel about the apocalypse, please give me your opinions.

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2025-03-02 04:41

The following suggestions could be used to write zombie apocalyptic novels: 1. Set the story background and world setting: For example, choose a specific time period as the story background, such as a period of disaster or a future world, and then set a specific place as the place where the story takes place. 2. Decide on the protagonist and storyline: Choose a protagonist to survive the zombie apocalypse and find a way to save the world. The storyline could include the protagonist's relationship with other characters, his adventures, and how he fought zombies. 3. Setting up the world view and character background: In the zombie apocalypse, setting the character background and world view is very important. This helps to build a real world so that readers can easily get involved in the story. For example, you can set up a society that has some form of power structure and hierarchy. These settings can help build the plot and characters. 4. Setting Zombies: The setting of zombies in zombie apocalyptic novels is very important. It needs to make the readers feel nervous and afraid. He could set some unique zombie types such as mutated humans or other types of zombies. 5. Setting up the character's personality and motivation: In zombie apocalyptic novels, the character's personality and motivation are also very important. You need to set up some characters with different motives and goals, such as saving the world, finding family, or pursuing power. Setting up conflicts and storylines: In zombie apocalyptic novels, conflicts and storylines are also very important. Some conflicts, such as the lack of resources, the pressure of survival, and other similar plots were needed to attract the attention of the readers.

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