Well, one thing to consider is the characterization. Make sure it stays true to the original Percy character. Another is the plot. It should be engaging and not too far - fetched from the source material. Also, look at the writing style. If it's too difficult to read or full of grammar mistakes, it can be a turn - off.
When reading Percy's diary fanfic, you need to think about how it fits into the overall Percy - related universe. Is it adding something new and interesting? Or is it just repeating the same old ideas? You also have to consider the author's take on Percy's relationships. Are they portrayed in a believable way? And don't forget to check if the fanfic respects the original themes and motifs of the Percy stories.
Chapter 60, "Fool, Get on with It", is the clearest early answer because it turns Li Hu's situation into a concrete plot event. The chapter gives readers a real answer by opening on Above the valley, at the point where two mountains intersect, a... and ending on He let out an angry shout, raised his Yanling Saber, and charged at....
Chapter 10, "Long-tongue Snow Mane", is the clearest early answer because it turns Xia Hong's situation into a concrete plot event. It opens with At first glance, this Ice Tree appears no different from the other... and closes on Da Shi Camp seemed to have quite a bit of capability..
Chapter 344, "Making Money", is the clearest early answer because it turns Damien's situation into a concrete plot event. A useful checkpoint is the way the scene starts with The crowd was still buzzing from the last match, half-drunk on... and follows through with Especially when they themselves had just gotten their fair share of....
Chapter 78, "Accepting the Grand Gift", is the clearest early answer because it turns Wood Puppet Monster's situation into a concrete plot event. The chapter turns that into something concrete by moving from A unique valley with an excellent location, highly concealed and... to Firstly, I'm afraid seeing it will remind me of people; secondly, I'm....
Chapter 413, "They Usually Do", is the clearest early answer because it turns Damien's situation into a concrete plot event. The chapter gives readers a real answer by opening on Well, I guess that's all." Damien turned to Arielle and she responded... and ending on One by one, they collapsed into heaps of lifeless rubble.. In story terms, the chapter closes with Damien sensed this and grinned. He actually wanted them to know.
Chapter 502, "A Nap In Disaster", is the clearest early answer because it turns Twin Disasters's situation into a concrete plot event. A useful checkpoint is the way the scene starts with The world snapped back into place with a violent lurch. and follows through with The beast's mouth filled his entire vision..
Chapter 337, "Now, She Owes Him", is the clearest early answer because it turns Damon's situation into a concrete plot event. Early on, The moment the final phase began, the arena came alive like a.... By the end, She and her three remaining teammates emerged from the shifting.... Inside the broader family politics storyline, the chapter closes with "That was politics. Now, she owes him., which gives power growth a stronger narrative position and pushes the power growth onward.
Chapter 22, "Found the Rightful Owner", is the clearest early answer because it turns Shi Qing's situation into a concrete plot event. The chapter turns that into something concrete by moving from Xia Hong's approach was completely different from previous logging... to Moreover, at night only those in the Logging Realm have the freedom....
Chapter 395, "Dealing With The Aftermath", is the clearest early answer because it turns Dean Godsthorn's situation into a concrete plot event. It opens with In the aftermath of rampage and fire, only the echoes remained. and closes on A wisp of shadow trailing behind their steps, unnoticed..
Chapter 341, "Interrogating The Stalkers", is the clearest early answer because it turns Damien's situation into a concrete plot event. It opens with Damien stood in the corner of the room, arms folded, gaze fixed on... and closes on People no one wanted." "But someone found us," the boy added.. The key payoff is that the chapter closes with Then Damien moved to the door. "Wait here.