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MerryPoppins
MerryPoppinsLv67yr
2017-09-11 18:33

The story suffers from the same flaws as most chinese webnovels: low quality writing/editing, unoriginality, unnecessary monologues and info dumps. The same character tropes like in A LOT of other stories fx: The fat 'funny' friend, and the beautiful and strong (possible) love interest. The story also suffers from 'dragging on the story to meet word count'-syndrome. Thanks to obsoletefactor for review.

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kong31
kong31Lv11

Hi there, just curious, so what are the novel titles that u think are good at qidian. Thanks

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SadisticPrince
SadisticPrinceLv5

he is bull****ting

SadisticPrince
SadisticPrinceLv5

this fooker did not even read i bet. smfh

EssentialChaos
EssentialChaosLv5

Sad to see such a dishonest review for a better than most story

SlySheep
SlySheepLv2

At least, I think the same as both reviewers. Nothing much behind this story, generic and bland, uncreative and boring, repetitive and illogical, pointless narrations and description (only for word count, like goddamn they not even gonna make an appearance anymore or there's no meaning to it, you dipsh*t!) and etc,etc,etc. To sum this up, I'm gonna quote someone else too : "I've read both this author's previous works and found that WoC was amazing, while TAoFE was complete sh*t. This novel is one of the most pretentious web novels I've read. The author has this strange theme of always choosing an underdog for an MC in his stories; an underdog that will fight all odds with his sweat and blood. Talent doesn't matter as long as you have a strong will and hardworking. Only, this is just an illusion to mask the excuses the author engineered such that the protagonist is actually lucky, has a somewhat convenient backdrop to excuse things that will happen in the future that will inevitably rise his level just because. As for the last, it has something to do with how the author uses his characters. Most, if not all, of his characters are one dimensional. They lack real personality and only identified by some cliche characteristics. Furthermore, it feels rather annoying to me to use other characters for his comic relief and power-up of the MC. An example for the former is how he shows the MC having a good time while another character currently experiencing a bad time. It felt forced. It's like hearing the author say, "Hey, you should laugh in this scene." or something. An example for the latter, on the other hand, is in the recent scenes in recent chapters (I'm in c41) wherein the girl character was conveniently hungry, conveniently was not able to resist eating normal food even though she, according to the author, only eats elemental food all her life, conveniently ate at the same restaurant the MC went to, conveniently has no money with her, conveniently only has her very important bracelet with her to exchange things with, and so conveniently was linked to the MC in an earlier manner. But that's not the only convenience that we can see. We also have the MC to bring his sword to practice because the sand puppet conveniently asked a convenient question, and a convenient sword embryo, that will conveniently absorb the bracelet. And then we have the Duan guy that will conveniently show up, conveniently say some words that will conveniently anger the other two, that will conveniently make them attack him without mercy, and will conveniently be not physically fit to defend himself, that will conveniently awaken some sort of thing to the MC. So many conveniences. I know that shows can only be deemed interesting if conveniences to make interesting things happen appear. But with so many convenience? That's bad writing in my book." Thx to kalp456 and Novelupdatesaccount1 from NU. Ha!

EssentialChaos:Sad to see such a dishonest review for a better than most story
EssentialChaos
EssentialChaosLv5

If u guys are starting to compare Chinese webnovels with the works of Gabo, Nabokov or say Tolkien, Sanderson and the ilk I have nothing more to say. Having read quite my fair share of "cliche" as in almost all other novels, this one was a welcome and refreshing change. If the characters in this story are 1D I don't understand how u would rate the characters in AGM, ATG, MGA, SS, StFSP,l etc, would that mean they are 0D? This novel could be compared to a spec of gold dust in a gigantic trash heap. To compare it with gems and stars out there wouldn't even fare as a fair comparison. Ofcourse you can compare it with ******* literature in wattpad and stuff, but tell me a non cliche novel and I will see Ur point a(if there was one) a bit more clearly. Typing on mobile ignore the errors

EssentialChaos
EssentialChaosLv5

A-mate-ur is censored lol

MerryPoppins
MerryPoppinsLv6

"AGM, ATG, MGA, SS, StFSP,l etc" Well, to me all these novels is just "trash heap", to be clear. At recent times I begin to think that is probably 90~% of all chinese novels that was read by me were utter-complete-garbage/pile of sh*t and I HATE every second that was spent on all these trashes. ugghh... But! maybe it all just my imagination and this novel is really gooood! (sarcasm,btw) Subjective, who cares!

EssentialChaos:If u guys are starting to compare Chinese webnovels with the works of Gabo, Nabokov or say Tolkien, Sanderson and the ilk I have nothing more to say. Having read quite my fair share of "cliche" as in almost all other novels, this one was a welcome and refreshing change. If the characters in this story are 1D I don't understand how u would rate the characters in AGM, ATG, MGA, SS, StFSP,l etc, would that mean they are 0D? This novel could be compared to a spec of gold dust in a gigantic trash heap. To compare it with gems and stars out there wouldn't even fare as a fair comparison. Ofcourse you can compare it with ******* literature in wattpad and stuff, but tell me a non cliche novel and I will see Ur point a(if there was one) a bit more clearly. Typing on mobile ignore the errors
EssentialChaos
EssentialChaosLv5

On the level of comparison with global literature, or just the fantasy genre ofcourse I agree to your point. Even this novel is just another "typical" MC's path to OP-ness. Just that I feel the characters are a whole lot more on a comparison level ; real. All I'm saying is this is a novel that is better than most in this heap of trash. But one might also say that better trash is still trash , but yeah

MerryPoppins:"AGM, ATG, MGA, SS, StFSP,l etc" Well, to me all these novels is just "trash heap", to be clear. At recent times I begin to think that is probably 90~% of all chinese novels that was read by me were utter-complete-garbage/pile of sh*t and I HATE every second that was spent on all these trashes. ugghh... But! maybe it all just my imagination and this novel is really gooood! (sarcasm,btw) Subjective, who cares!
SlySheep
SlySheepLv2

By the way, about "a-mate-urs", J. K. Rowling was ama-r too, she worked as a ****** teacher of English. But she really did good job. The world she build is amazing even with all these plot holes or flaws. She written a great story that received an award as 'the best-selling book series in history' and it's all were done when she was in "poverty" as single mother. Btw, excpect for the Cursed Child, it's just trash or garbage or whatever, just burn it. That amount of plot holes and bad writing was astronomical. Why the f*ck did you bring back that stupid Time-Turner, now time in your world not cicle but parallel or why did you say "Hermione was always black". It was written by you that she was white and it was you who picked Emma Watson, ffs. Omg, it's so cringy and dumb. But anyway I think you got my point, it doesn't matter if you are professional or ama-r it's all the same. What IS important is how much effort and creativity you put in your work. If all you gonna do count words and put bland plot awaiting for your revenue, it's not gonna work, it will NEVER gonna work. **: Haahaha! Srsly? A-mate-ur is censored? How can your ego and self esteem to be so low. But well at least you know your place, humph. pffhahahah

EssentialChaos:If u guys are starting to compare Chinese webnovels with the works of Gabo, Nabokov or say Tolkien, Sanderson and the ilk I have nothing more to say. Having read quite my fair share of "cliche" as in almost all other novels, this one was a welcome and refreshing change. If the characters in this story are 1D I don't understand how u would rate the characters in AGM, ATG, MGA, SS, StFSP,l etc, would that mean they are 0D? This novel could be compared to a spec of gold dust in a gigantic trash heap. To compare it with gems and stars out there wouldn't even fare as a fair comparison. Ofcourse you can compare it with ******* literature in wattpad and stuff, but tell me a non cliche novel and I will see Ur point a(if there was one) a bit more clearly. Typing on mobile ignore the errors
SlySheep
SlySheepLv2

HAHAHAHA! EVEN P-S AND S-I-M-P-L-E IS CENSORED!! HAHHAH f***ing get out of here, *peh*

EssentialChaos:If u guys are starting to compare Chinese webnovels with the works of Gabo, Nabokov or say Tolkien, Sanderson and the ilk I have nothing more to say. Having read quite my fair share of "cliche" as in almost all other novels, this one was a welcome and refreshing change. If the characters in this story are 1D I don't understand how u would rate the characters in AGM, ATG, MGA, SS, StFSP,l etc, would that mean they are 0D? This novel could be compared to a spec of gold dust in a gigantic trash heap. To compare it with gems and stars out there wouldn't even fare as a fair comparison. Ofcourse you can compare it with ******* literature in wattpad and stuff, but tell me a non cliche novel and I will see Ur point a(if there was one) a bit more clearly. Typing on mobile ignore the errors
MerryPoppins
MerryPoppinsLv6

(ಡ艸ಡ) I-it's g-gold. pffff

SlySheep:HAHAHAHA! EVEN P-S AND S-I-M-P-L-E IS CENSORED!! HAHHAH f***ing get out of here, *peh*
MerryPoppins
MerryPoppinsLv6

Yeah, all that matters is your creativity, effort and little bit of luck in the right place. Don't remind me about this abomination, uggghhhh. She almost ruined her own world. She needs to deflate her's ego, couse to all critics her only answer was "THAT'S RACIST!!!" or ban. Stupid senile hag.

SlySheep:By the way, about "a-mate-urs", J. K. Rowling was ama-r too, she worked as a ****** teacher of English. But she really did good job. The world she build is amazing even with all these plot holes or flaws. She written a great story that received an award as 'the best-selling book series in history' and it's all were done when she was in "poverty" as single mother. Btw, excpect for the Cursed Child, it's just trash or garbage or whatever, just burn it. That amount of plot holes and bad writing was astronomical. Why the f*ck did you bring back that stupid Time-Turner, now time in your world not cicle but parallel or why did you say "Hermione was always black". It was written by you that she was white and it was you who picked Emma Watson, ffs. Omg, it's so cringy and dumb. But anyway I think you got my point, it doesn't matter if you are professional or ama-r it's all the same. What IS important is how much effort and creativity you put in your work. If all you gonna do count words and put bland plot awaiting for your revenue, it's not gonna work, it will NEVER gonna work. **: Haahaha! Srsly? A-mate-ur is censored? How can your ego and self esteem to be so low. But well at least you know your place, humph. pffhahahah
MerryPoppins
MerryPoppinsLv6

I don't mind plot where main point is "typical MC's path to OP-ness" even kinda like them because of my individualistic nature, but they just can't write it in an interesting way. At least most of them.

EssentialChaos:On the level of comparison with global literature, or just the fantasy genre ofcourse I agree to your point. Even this novel is just another "typical" MC's path to OP-ness. Just that I feel the characters are a whole lot more on a comparison level ; real. All I'm saying is this is a novel that is better than most in this heap of trash. But one might also say that better trash is still trash , but yeah
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MilkshakeLv5

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