Review Detail of NamelessPioneer in Ruin of Heaven

Author here.This is my first approach at writing so it might have many shortcomings so please inform me about it so I can do a better job.It might also contain plenty of grammatical errors as English isn't my first language but I will try my best to make it as few as I can.And lastly, please leave a review so I can improve my shortcomings. Thank you all for reaching.