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RedMoth
RedMoth作者1yr
2023-08-22 00:08

This is my forth time writing a novel and I can say clearly that I am suck at writing novels but I want you not judge my novel just by the first chapters as I can see that some of you saw this a novel as a revenge novel and it's not wrong but just bear with me .

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B0mbaCl0ck
B0mbaCl0ckLv15

I wonder.. how can you write 4 novels and still be bad at it xD.. the content in itself is not bad, but the way you write it is hard to believe and lacks substance..feels superficial and forced.

RedMoth
RedMoth作者

now I decided to ease my mind and just write simply what I have in my mind as like you said before my way of writing seems forced, but now it doesn't matter anymore and I will just write what goes in my mind and thinks of the way to give you the feeling .

B0mbaCl0ck:I wonder.. how can you write 4 novels and still be bad at it xD.. the content in itself is not bad, but the way you write it is hard to believe and lacks substance..feels superficial and forced.
B0mbaCl0ck
B0mbaCl0ckLv15

A piece of advice, focus on writing simple ideas in short sentences. You write long paragraphs that lose much of their meaning, since the english is quite broken.Keep it simple and it will look better in form.

RedMoth:now I decided to ease my mind and just write simply what I have in my mind as like you said before my way of writing seems forced, but now it doesn't matter anymore and I will just write what goes in my mind and thinks of the way to give you the feeling .
RedMoth
RedMoth作者

someone told me the same before that I should write short paragraphs as the readers don't like reading the long ones and also to make it filled with emotions in the simplest way . my english is good and that can be seen in the latest chapters , but the mistakes you saw before was because I write on the phone in a high speed that I make mistakes and the phone corrects them to wrong or different words than what I wanted to write but now I review my chapter after writing it and correct the mistakes.

B0mbaCl0ck:A piece of advice, focus on writing simple ideas in short sentences. You write long paragraphs that lose much of their meaning, since the english is quite broken.Keep it simple and it will look better in form.
B0mbaCl0ck
B0mbaCl0ckLv15

Ohh that makes sense. Btw, Dialogue is the most important. Try evoking the emotions from conversations and reactions rather than describing everything, since it feels more like a journal than a story. Dialogue enhances the engagement and lets readers draw their own opinions.

RedMoth:someone told me the same before that I should write short paragraphs as the readers don't like reading the long ones and also to make it filled with emotions in the simplest way . my english is good and that can be seen in the latest chapters , but the mistakes you saw before was because I write on the phone in a high speed that I make mistakes and the phone corrects them to wrong or different words than what I wanted to write but now I review my chapter after writing it and correct the mistakes.
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