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Raul_Romero
Raul_RomeroLv111yr
2023-07-22 16:05

READ UP TO THE CURRENT CHAPTER (12). I must say that so far I have found it an excellent read, I have no complaint that exceed my limits of tolerance in terms of certain "rational" aspects. I don't like to say anything to the author in terms of the plot so I will only say my expectations regarding certain elements, I hope no time travel, no random legendary appearances, I expect a growth in the "strength" aspect that is a) Slow and cumulative with longer chapters so as not to affect the speed of the plot, or b) fast in terms of time jumps but reasonable with a good explanation of "why". My fears are that if it's not a harem you'll create relationships with people that will make you wish they were the FML but you'll only choose one and then we'll all get hurt hahaha, my other fear is that you don't occupy pokemons because they're "overused", when the truth is that among thousands of fics only a few are good and all those great pokemons are lost just because they don't want to be "cliche", out of 1000 that use them only 10 are good fics, and of those 10 only 3 are ongoing, so if you want a Charizard, a Garchomp or Abra, that's fine as long as the story is good

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BonAurevoir
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Hey there, since you left a review, I wanted to answer some of the concerns you brought up for anyone else who might share them.Other than Hoopa, I wasn't really planning on having random legendries show up. They might be referenced here and there, but when it comes to actual appearances, they will only show up when I think it is necessary for the plot. Hoopa was just a suggestion given to me by a friend, which ended up really helping me flesh out what the Olympia’s school part was gonna look like.When it comes to growth, I want to take an approach similar to option a. Right now, the only reason I am somewhat skipping through his training arcs is because I don't want to delay the start of his journey once he is 15. I see his childhood era as a prelude to the actual story. For a story set in the pokemon world, there sure isn't a lot of them right now, lol. As for creating relationships with multiple girls, that might make you wish they the FML. I have to admit that I do have a version of that planned.But rather than just having 50 people that are in love with mc and mc only ending up with one, I plan to at most have small crushes that turn into friendships(though most of the friendships won't begin with a crush) when it comes to girls that aren’t the Female Lead. There's going to be an example of what I mean during chap 14/15/16 plus a stupid joke I have brewing for the future with Nurse Joy's niece lol.Thanks for leaving such an in-depth review. Reviews like this help me answer questions other potential readers might have in the future as well as make me think about the future of the story.

BonAurevoir
BonAurevoirAuthor

Jesus, I don't know why my reply got all bundled into one massive paragraph, I had it formatted properly when I wrote it.

BonAurevoir
BonAurevoirAuthor

I tried to write up the response on both pc and mobile and they both turned into one massive paragraph. Webnovel is just being weird. Sorry for the stupid gigantic paragraph formatting that it turned into.

Raul_Romero
Raul_RomeroLv11

As for the legendary ones it would be amazing if they didn't appear until much later, for me they are incredible sources of power capable of destroying entire countries, I feel that it would be better that way, seeing that Hoopa can literally play with the dimensions, when they appear very often or are very friendly I feel that they take away the magic of Pokemon and the idea of ​​being legendary is lost, when they come out very often, with their power levels it feels like all the training you do with your own Pokemon is for nothing, the sensation of a stable scale of power is lost, there is a Fancic on fanfiction.net called Sacrifice and Subjugation, I feel that the way to portray a legendary is the most appropriate, you should give it a read just as a small reference. As for the girls it would be better if you only choose one that you only create attraction with that one, the change of dynamic from attraction to just friendship is too complicated to portray even in real life, if you go for Harem as long as you do it well it doesn't matter, usually the more eccentric the girl the easier it is to put it together. Regarding the growth of strength given the option you chose, it would be a good idea to make the chapters longer when it comes to training since they practically write themselves when you have a target growth goal for that "day", I have no problem with the slow but progressive plot, the problem is when the plot slows down due to padding or things that can easily be described in a couple of lines and it goes on too long, an example would be: if for each chapter you have a perspective of the percentage in which to advance to the plot in that chapter, keep it the same (for example 1% per chapter) and if you add training, make it just as extra words for the ch and not delay the plot

BonAurevoir:Hey there, since you left a review, I wanted to answer some of the concerns you brought up for anyone else who might share them.Other than Hoopa, I wasn't really planning on having random legendries show up. They might be referenced here and there, but when it comes to actual appearances, they will only show up when I think it is necessary for the plot. Hoopa was just a suggestion given to me by a friend, which ended up really helping me flesh out what the Olympia’s school part was gonna look like.When it comes to growth, I want to take an approach similar to option a. Right now, the only reason I am somewhat skipping through his training arcs is because I don't want to delay the start of his journey once he is 15. I see his childhood era as a prelude to the actual story. For a story set in the pokemon world, there sure isn't a lot of them right now, lol. As for creating relationships with multiple girls, that might make you wish they the FML. I have to admit that I do have a version of that planned.But rather than just having 50 people that are in love with mc and mc only ending up with one, I plan to at most have small crushes that turn into friendships(though most of the friendships won't begin with a crush) when it comes to girls that aren’t the Female Lead. There's going to be an example of what I mean during chap 14/15/16 plus a stupid joke I have brewing for the future with Nurse Joy's niece lol.Thanks for leaving such an in-depth review. Reviews like this help me answer questions other potential readers might have in the future as well as make me think about the future of the story.
mow
mowLv4

This will be a Single Female lead then i take it?

BonAurevoir:Hey there, since you left a review, I wanted to answer some of the concerns you brought up for anyone else who might share them.Other than Hoopa, I wasn't really planning on having random legendries show up. They might be referenced here and there, but when it comes to actual appearances, they will only show up when I think it is necessary for the plot. Hoopa was just a suggestion given to me by a friend, which ended up really helping me flesh out what the Olympia’s school part was gonna look like.When it comes to growth, I want to take an approach similar to option a. Right now, the only reason I am somewhat skipping through his training arcs is because I don't want to delay the start of his journey once he is 15. I see his childhood era as a prelude to the actual story. For a story set in the pokemon world, there sure isn't a lot of them right now, lol. As for creating relationships with multiple girls, that might make you wish they the FML. I have to admit that I do have a version of that planned.But rather than just having 50 people that are in love with mc and mc only ending up with one, I plan to at most have small crushes that turn into friendships(though most of the friendships won't begin with a crush) when it comes to girls that aren’t the Female Lead. There's going to be an example of what I mean during chap 14/15/16 plus a stupid joke I have brewing for the future with Nurse Joy's niece lol.Thanks for leaving such an in-depth review. Reviews like this help me answer questions other potential readers might have in the future as well as make me think about the future of the story.
BonAurevoir
BonAurevoirAuthor

Yup. He'll have some female friends/rivals cuz most of the interesting pokemon characters are girls lol but only one romance.

mow:This will be a Single Female lead then i take it?
mow
mowLv4

Bet

BonAurevoir:Yup. He'll have some female friends/rivals cuz most of the interesting pokemon characters are girls lol but only one romance.
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