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2023-08-28 10:37

Four chapters in and I'm already interested at the story. Personally, I've not liked first person stories, but I have to admit that this webnovel got me hooked on Snowe's perspective and her viewpoint. The progressive world-building is an interesting pick as it allowed me as the reader to grow with the world around them, which I think it's pretty neat. As for the writing quality? it's pretty good. The grammar and writing style is good, personally, and although there was just a few minor mishaps such as a spelling mistake or two, it did not bother me too much. But there's always room for improvement and striving to be better Author! Overall, after reading four chapters, I think it's a pretty good Webnovel that deserves some credit. Great job, and good luck with future works.

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Thank you! I really appreciate the feedback! It's still a work in progress, I plan on going back and editing everything bit by bit. I felt inspired to write recently and your review helps to motivate me to continue working on this piece!

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