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2023-06-13 15:23

I must say for a new author your work is remarkable though you say english is your third language and this novel may have many gramatical errrors but so far i haven't found one the phrases and sentence are fine and the choices of words too. As for the story it's hard to say since only 3 chapters are avaialable, though the start looks promosing hope it maintains the pace and don't give up in the middle of work. As for the writing style it can be improved further as its not much engaging plus the chapters are also short try to improve that.

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Thank you, for your precious review I, will try to improve the writing style and make the chapter longer. Again, thanks for the support please, keep supporting.

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