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Taylor_Valk
Taylor_ValkLv11yr
2023-05-06 10:18

Hey yo. Shadow here/Taylor. I love love love your story thus far. Keep it up. Although yes your story slowly is becoming a new system; you have destroyed all tropes. Yes, the main character gets hurt and wakes up in a System; he is not dead like most rebirth novels. He is still alive; and willing to fight for Mana, if need be. The 'System' is that of an Alien Overlord taking over Earth and wanting to connect it to his Kingdom, but K is determined in due time, to stop that; at all means necessary. Can't wait to see where this story goes next. But please; don't make K make stupid fast decisions; or have him go through life alone uncovering the truth. You said he made a vow to change his life and live for himself and not others, but if he does get friends who want to help him; please don't have him turn them away immediately. Or if you do, they fight to stay. *Huge virtual hug*

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