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vorlefan
vorlefanLv31yr
2023-03-21 21:56

It is a nice story that touches in the family sphere as the angular stone. Some of the interactions are really enjoyable to read. Things to improve: Grammar: Some redundancy and hard sentences make it block the flow of the reader. Characters: While I liked the interaction between characters. It misses some inner thoughts on the making for the characters. Using subtext would create more connection with the public. All in all, keep the good work

FAMILY ABOVE ALL: BATTLING AGAINST GODS

LittleGiant7
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Noted! Thanks for your opinion.

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The first few chapters of this story showcase a mix of different genres, including fantasy, comedy, and adventure. The author's writing style is engaging and descriptive, which allows readers to easily visualize the scenes in their minds. The characters are distinct and have unique personalities that make them interesting to follow, and the dialogue between them is well-written, with humor and wit sprinkled throughout. However, there are some areas that could be improved upon. The transitions between different scenes and perspectives could be smoother to prevent confusion, and there are some grammatical errors and typos that could be corrected with thorough editing. Additionally, some parts of the story feel rushed, especially toward the end where a lot of information is presented in a short amount of time. Overall, the story has potential but could benefit from some editing and revisions to improve the pacing and clarity of the story.

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