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Dee1inquent
Dee1inquentLv121yr
2023-03-21 08:10

I hate giving bad reviews and normally I'm a "if you can't say anything nice, stay silent" kinda girl but this is... hmmm, the only thing promising is the plot. Think you used to wrong year, it's not set in 1991 or 1980. Too many spelling mistakes, wrong words being used (taught instead of thought), using abbreviations i.e. thou, not capitalising the start of sentences or the start of speech, in fact hardly using any capital letters at all, not for names or anything. Sorry love, I appreciate the effort you made writing this but it's not easy to read and I would not pay for this, let alone use free fps I spent time to get, the 20 minutes from reading it for the fp reward was enough for me as I don't think it would improve the more chapters I read. Sorry. 😞

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Jennyash
JennyashLv3

I am sorry for all the mistakes, this is still my first book, but I will make sure to correct them soon.

Dee1inquent
Dee1inquentLv12

Like I said, the plot is promising, with all the mistakes rectified, it will be a good novel. ^^

Jennyash:I am sorry for all the mistakes, this is still my first book, but I will make sure to correct them soon.
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