Review Detail of Amelion in GOT/ASOIAF: Break the Wheel
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this story is very confusing, in my opinion writing this fanfic is very messy, you also write too much pov of each character without you focusing on mc
GOT/ASOIAF: Break the Wheel
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can't you at least focus on mc, because for me the first impression when reading this fanfic is not good, that's what makes me not want to continue reading it. this is my honest opinion
Pretending_Author:I am curious which chapter you made it to? The first 25 chapters are a time skip showing all the changes I made to canon to lay the ground work for the next 1000 chapters or more. Cant grow a tree from nothing...
You must have never seen the show or the book this is based on, the entire point of this 'world' is the different POV's and seeing how the players in the 'game' play. Taking out other peoples POV is like taking out the magic of harry potter, it just does not make sense for the world. It focuses a lot more on the MC when the stage is set after chapter 25 but I don't recommend reading about a world that is designed to change POV if you don't like POV swapping...
Amelion:can't you at least focus on mc, because for me the first impression when reading this fanfic is not good, that's what makes me not want to continue reading it. this is my honest opinion
Amelion:can't you at least focus on mc, because for me the first impression when reading this fanfic is not good, that's what makes me not want to continue reading it. this is my honest opinion
New 'reader' here at least I was for like 6 chapters. Most people won't read your story exactly because of this mess, the first 25 chapters as you said here is just a massive info dump nonsensical one at that (This killed most people's desire to read your story, me included).
Pretending_Author:I am curious which chapter you made it to? The first 25 chapters are a time skip showing all the changes I made to canon to lay the ground work for the next 1000 chapters or more. Cant grow a tree from nothing...
Enormiity:New 'reader' here at least I was for like 6 chapters. Most people won't read your story exactly because of this mess, the first 25 chapters as you said here is just a massive info dump nonsensical one at that (This killed most people's desire to read your story, me included).
Bro, it is hardly fine If your storys early chapters are a turn off it doesn’t matter their purpose or how the story is later on as nobody will be willing to read up to that point
Pretending_Author:That's fine :)
John_Ryan_8278:Bro, it is hardly fine If your storys early chapters are a turn off it doesn’t matter their purpose or how the story is later on as nobody will be willing to read up to that point
Your majesty I am just a humble serf and "casual reader" 1000 chapter you say ...... Well you comment and commitment did not age well. Because of disrespect to you must be hanged form your sky piercing ego. Below I am looking the "1000" chapters.
Pretending_Author:I am curious which chapter you made it to? The first 25 chapters are a time skip showing all the changes I made to canon to lay the ground work for the next 1000 chapters or more. Cant grow a tree from nothing...
RegalObscure:Your majesty I am just a humble serf and "casual reader" 1000 chapter you say ...... Well you comment and commitment did not age well. Because of disrespect to you must be hanged form your sky piercing ego. Below I am looking the "1000" chapters.image
If you got to make that many changes to the story were it’s pasically pov swaps just make your own story at that point
Pretending_Author:I am curious which chapter you made it to? The first 25 chapters are a time skip showing all the changes I made to canon to lay the ground work for the next 1000 chapters or more. Cant grow a tree from nothing...