Item: Heavenly God Technique in Douluo Dalu
Rating: 2

BlackDragneelLv42yr

2022-11-01 23:57

I will keep it short. Interesting Concept But Bad Grammar, No Character Development, Hollow Side Characters, Lack Of Common Sense, Almost Everything Is Confusing, Interactions Are At NEET level.

Heavenly God Technique in Douluo Dalu

HeavenlySpaceDrago

3.8

102 Chs

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HeavenlySpaceDrago作者

I already update the new one using Grammarly.

2yr

BlackDragneelLv4

If you did I'll give you another better review but for the love of god try to make the character interactions a bit more natural and not inhumane. The cultivation concepts are a bit vague and need to be explained better.

2yr

HeavenlySpaceDrago作者

This is my first time writing, so I don't know what to do. So I'll try my best to make a good interactions.

BlackDragneel:If you did I'll give you another better review but for the love of god try to make the character interactions a bit more natural and not inhumane. The cultivation concepts are a bit vague and need to be explained better.

2yr

malinizgeldiiLv1

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