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Phantomfiend
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2022-08-08 06:01

The author should use the auxiliary chapter for explanation or character introduction. It will be a convenience for readers if the webnovel has a neat arrangement of chapters. The use of capital letters in certain sections is also important. The writing is messed up. Sometimes there is a space before the comma. In terms of the story, I quite enjoyed it but the unusual writing style really made me feel bad. I thought, the writer needs to read one chapter of the top novel then use it as a guide for writing.

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MissAlexis
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Honestly , i think i really needed this honest review . I'll work on my faults and make the book less messed up , And I'm just a beginner but i really do need to improve . The writing style is like the ones on Wattpad since that's the app I'm used but I'll make it better.

Phantomfiend
PhantomfiendLv4

You forgot to give me a review. I confused at first after saw this reply and checked my review, and yours not yet to write one for me.

MissAlexis:Honestly , i think i really needed this honest review . I'll work on my faults and make the book less messed up , And I'm just a beginner but i really do need to improve . The writing style is like the ones on Wattpad since that's the app I'm used but I'll make it better.
MissAlexis
MissAlexis作者

Sorry I was kinda busy, but i just left mine.

Phantomfiend:You forgot to give me a review. I confused at first after saw this reply and checked my review, and yours not yet to write one for me.
Phantomfiend
PhantomfiendLv4

Since it's done now, it's okay. I'm sorry for keep bothering you. If only you tell me you will do it later instead in few hours. I wouldn't wait. Anyway, thank you!

MissAlexis:Sorry I was kinda busy, but i just left mine.
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