There is little continuity and cohesion to the story for atleast the 18 chapters I tried to read. Its worse that the passage of time isn't made clear and that chronologically not much makes sense when compared with the HP books. Characters also do a sudden 180 in their disposition to eachother which is very confusing. The story feels like a patchwork of scenes that are chronologically out of order and thus don't make sense.

Read till chapter 6. So far the story is really good and interesting. Even I am not a Potter-head, I can still imagine clearly what's going on in the plot from my common knowledge. Maybe, the author is still inexperienced in this field that I found common mistakes here and there, but aside from that the idea of introducing system into witch's world is really unique. The only thing I would like the author to do is to upgrade his writing skills since I see a lot of potential in this. Rest, I wish author all the best for his journey ^^