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2023-03-23 02:08

need some serious proofreading, can barely get through a paragraph without seeing tens of mistakes.

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EsZeus
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To put it into simple words: AMAZING. The quality of this novel is through the roof, and one of the best, or now my most favored book on Webnovel. -> This Review was written with chapter 100 <- To explain it further, I have to describe a few things first. The grammar is amazingly done, but smaller issues are here and there in between paragraphs. Normal things while writing, but could be prevented if someone had proofread it before releasing. But still, I think it deserves all the 5 Stars fully. The plot: The novel describes Marcius, who is a merge of two souls. One of the original of this world, and one of our own reality, Earth. They are merged together, thrown into a world that has cultivation AND magic, two different systems. Here things are getting interesting. Instead of knowing everything, because the soul from Earth has read a Novel within the exact same fantasy world, he can plan ahead, still makes mistakes, and learns from his failures. The "new" person, merged from those two souls, is smart, but not annoyingly so. He is cunning, but also kinda normal. He is cold, but also warmhearted to his family and friends. Every person you encounter in this story has depth, and the world feels amazingly well thought. I find no single issue with the whole plot, story, characters and numbers or whatever is presented in this story. Pro: - Worldbuilding is top notch - Characters with depth and not flat 2D - Numbers and the "system" are well thought through - Story telling is top notch - Pacing is exactly right and feels perfect - The reading flow is awesome, exactly with ups and down at the right time Con: - Simple grammar issues every Author has while writing could be prevented if he himself would proofread his chapters at least once after writing, or fix the issues when readers point them out in the paragraph comments All in all a kind of "perfect" novel. I can´t find any other words. I have read it like a sponge, and it never felt wrong or left me unsatisfied. READ IT.

IcySquid
IcySquidLv15

okay, so I don't do alot of reviews. But I feel like this story deserves it, im at chapter 131 at the time of writing this, the story immersive and fun to read overall. There are small problems with grammar here and there but nothing too major, new chapters have come regularly since I started reading and they're decently long and very rarely fillers. Most characters introduced have some significance over the story/plot and not many needless characters you forget 3 chapters later. This novel is a system novel but the system is more of a background feature than most, which I like. the powersystem is comprehensible and not all over the place and the buildup of the MC going against stronger and stronger foes is great and not forced for the most part unlike most wuxia novels that are like "oh no, you killed my son so now I must avenge you" then the MC gets stronger and kills that guy and then another guy appears and says "you killed an elder of our sect, now you must die" and then he kills the sect and that sect turns out is a branch of a bigger one and all that. anyways you get what I'm saying. just hella frustrated seeing the same trope in every other wuxia novel haha. back to the topic at hand, it does overall everything well, storybuilding quite slow at some points but greatly informative and fun. character design is great overall. there are some shallow characters but most of the time it's good. Honestly all I can say is try it out for yourself, you might be surprised. (typed this on my phone so sorry for any grammatical errors)

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