It seems to be decent and has a lot of potential but if I have one thing, it woild be I feel like his growth should be a bit slow at the start then have a increase in growth as he grows

This Fan fic has a Good base plot BUT the story progression is really disappointing. 1 There is no info how did he got system points and also he had skills and gain again in later chapters like SAGE skill, also in the beginning he had 19 skill points but spend 25 skill points and still left 10+ skill points. 2. He created servants and maids using shadow army but author forget the difference between living beings and shadow. 3. Cleria and Ddraig love is like you just need to meet him once and later you will be in love with MC. 4. He was just 4 year old in the start and you just make him a Training Maniac. 5. The progress of his status and abilities gaining is not understandable. you just write how he gained abilities but never show the process of it properly. 6. It makes readers skip to read interesting part because There is so less conversation and more and more MONOLOGUE type narration and you skipping the fun of struggling of gaining abilities and his daily life. 7. He is with Irina and his family but you just completed it in just few paragraphs. where you can write it a full chapter.

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it is share your system at work day like let's give people who will back stab me a system with all the functions except one that is a betrayal waiting to happen

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