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analyst123
analyst123Lv112yr
2022-04-20 22:34

Pros World building Loving family Vr game mechanics Cons MC character is not consistent. He is supposedly a genius but I haven’t seen any such thing from him. Being a genius, he is also oblivious to females around him I don’t mind stories with or without harem. But this one is obviously going for the non harem route with Luna as the fmc but leading lot of girls to the MC. Amanda is not properly resolved

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R_Kirbs
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then there's the part where all the women are so weirdly protecting of him this thing needs CPS.

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Alekzi
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After writing 100 chapters, I decided to do a new author review. I have gotten a great response so far, and that gave me a boost of motivation to keep writing this; and after writing 100 chapters, I already know that the story is only beginning, there is so much left to write, and I have a hunch that it will take easily over 1000 chapters to complete, maybe even 2000. Second, I have gotten a few toxic messages about how MC's looks, because he looks girly and is around 170cm, so I have gotten a lot of messages about making him taller, etc., and that may happen or may not, I am not going to spoil it, but I have reasoning for his looks and his height, and none of those will change before I am ready to reveal the reasoning of his looks and what happened in his childhood. Third, I have written a lot of mystery, and I enjoyed it immensely. I have given a few subtle hints on the chapters that might reveal why MC is different from the rest, and that White Online isn't as normal as it seems at first, so good luck on finding those. Fourth, I have seen a few theories made by my readers, and I am sometimes terrified of how well you guys found out about some things which still haven't been revealed yet; it is nice to see all kinds of theories, even though some aren't correct, but it is still nice to read those. Fifth, about a love interest. Some of you guys might have read the synopsis and seen the tags, but I will still say this. This will be a No Harem novel with only one love interest, and even if some of you guys like Harem, you guys should still try and who knows, some of you might like it. I decided to lock the chapters only around the 53th chap so that everyone has enough time to read and find out if they like it enough to keep paying for more chapters. Thanks, everyone for reading, and I hope you guys support me in this very long journey.

Ullyr
UllyrLv15

Alekzi asked me to leave a review as a fellow author and as the editor of this novel, and I will be as truthful as possible. I wanted to read this, as I am a friend to Alekzi, but I couldn't bring myself to do it at first because as an English native, it was difficult for me to deal with the sentence structure. After some chit-chatting, we came to an agreement that I would help him bring the writing up to snuff. It will take a while, but I'll be doing it as fast as I can for his future readers! Daily released chapters will be edited before posting, and I will tackle the former chapters as I can (: As for the story itself, I regret not reading this sooner! Even if there are issues with the grammar, Alekzi has had experience from writing many books before this, and he has truly mastered the art of captivation! The plot of the novel up to current is well thought out, the outline of current and future novel events is meticulously drawn out, and 'almost' every chapter has just enough entertainment to keep you hooked! Isaac is an intelligent (Not a super genius) character who almost completely lacks prior experience in MMO or VRMMO settings. He doesn't just automatically start as the best in the world as is seen in so many other VRMMO novels, and is actually somewhat outclassed in the earlier chapters. As White Online isn't set up like any VRMMO that was released previously in this world, his intelligence and lack of video game experience actually assist him in climbing his way up the ranks from the bottom of the barrell! I have enjoyed my read, and I hope that my work in raising the quality of this novel helps many others enjoy their read as well!

EnterGoodNameHere
EnterGoodNameHereLv14

This review is after reading chapter 151 and as I’m writing this I am nowhere close to being caught up. So some of the things I’m talking about could have changed by now. Alright so the novel overall is pretty good but it has some distinct problems that tend to annoy readers, including me. The story overall has an interesting premise. The characters are interesting and I don’t really dislike any of them(except for the ones your supposed to dislike of course.) The story does tend to fall into some cliches and some situations that don’t make sense at times. Though it’s not really possible to make a completely unique story and for the most part the hiccups aren’t that bad. Now the story itself doesn’t have to many problems, but the ones that it does have show up often enough to be a problem. 1) The author’s first language isn’t English and it’s pretty easy to tell. I personally don’t really care to much but I know it’s a turn off for a lot of people so just pointing it out. 2) In the story the Mc is called a genius by multiple characters as well as the author. This isn’t true at all as he’s shown to be average or slightly above average during the story. (and don’t even get me started on his eq.) The characters calling him a genius is fine as those that do are normally biased and it makes sense coming from them. I would also like to say that this isn’t necessarily a bad thing. The mc doesn’t have to be a genius for a good story. There are plenty of good stories with mcs that are just smart, average, and even ones where the mc is a little slow. I personally think it’s more accurate to call him talented as he’s been confirmed confirmed to learn things fast. 3) This is related to my last point kinda but the author tends to make the Mc not realize certain things that are pretty obvious for the sake of the story. For one it kinda breaks immersion and 2 it further makes calling him a genius seem wrong. As I said before, there’s nothing wrong with your Mc not being a genius, but if based on previous experiences they would be able to figure something out either let them figure it out or change it a bit to where it makes sense that they wouldn’t. The worst part about this one is that within like a minute I can normally think of a small change in the situation or dialogue to make it make sense why he wouldn’t know. It makes it feel like the author isn’t putting that much effort in the story when he doesn’t really come off that way. So overall it’s a really good story premise and I feel like if those problems were fixed the story would be so much better and would probably be a story I’m extremely eager to read instead of just enjoying.

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