You gotta learn punctuation man. You literally write a whole paragraph without a single dot to seperate the sentences. Let me give you an example. You wrote: „...then I knew what it was missing me without hesitation i started to dance with it...“ when it should be: „...then I knew what it was missing. Me. Without hesitation I started to dance with it...“. There is stuff like this in literally every paragraph. You try to go around it by adding an "and" every now and then but that just makes the sentences uncomfortably long and awkward to read.

Just here to tell you to fix the title. It's " An Elf's " not " An Elves "...'Elves' is the word for more than one elf..which contradicts the 'an' you have right before it. Make sure the grammar of your TITLE is correct at least..though it was actually a warning for what came inside..

Finally found a house elf ff just for that 5 stars

The punctuation is terrible. Each paragraph is just one huge run on sentence. It causes the narration of the MC to come across as raving lunacy. You can't help but imagine the narrator is breathless at the end of each paragraph.

Yeah so this fic is a dumpster fire, and basically complete and utter garbage. Unfortunately it almosr comes across like the author was intentionally trolling the readers with the amount of typos and god awful grammar that filled every chapter. Author somehow managed to misspell every single word or name of any important character. Sentences make little to no sense and the overall plot is a complete nightmare. At one point he’s sacrificing children, at another he’s making plans to make the marauders friends (for what reason i still dont know), only to then start a house war in Hogwarts? All to serve as a distraction so he can get a real elf body only to immediately openly declare war on wizards. All of this is done with ”increased intelligence” from Ravenclaw’s Diadem. Unfortunately the maximum IQ of a character in a book is the authors, and in this case the author is a mentally handicapped jackalope. This was more of a fever dream than an actual fanfic and honestly I wish I never read this pile of garbage

Please continue this story! Pretty please! I truly enyoy reading about an underdog clawing his way up the ladder and creating something new and exiting.

The only plus is that it doesnt follows the harry Potters story so its not repetetive, but... . Author, is taking out too much BS for my taste, he doesnt even care and think about it, he just makes something out of nowhere and writes as if its normal. MCs growth is too fast, in my opinion, and everyone there is just too weak compared to MCs growth, and this will probably in my opinion lead to Nerfing the MC sooner then later as author will get this way fast to end of the story. All in all this is another story where the MC is just too OP too fast.

This probably one of the better fanfics I've read so far it has a great concept it's writing is some of the best I've seen in these website although there are some mistakes here and there grammar wise, but overall I'd say its one the better HP fanfics out there, Highly recommended

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you deserve 4 simply for house elves FF I've been trying to find these kind of ffs I will update later after reading it hope it will be worth reading