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Ice_PrincesssLv43yr
2021-10-02 19:51

The story has great potential. As I was reading, I noticed errors here and there in terms of grammar and spelling so I'd suggest you just go back and double check your chapters. I believe that if you sort out those errors, your story will flow smoothly .Other than that, it is an interesting story and I'm definitely going to keep an eye on it. [img=recommend]

Starts as a Vampiress, Ends into a Villainess

authortinnnnn
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GloriousGacha
GloriousGachaLv1

Wonderfully worded, great descriptions had me lost there I would love more chapters though but we must wai for good quality Keep up the good work author

3yr

Book_Pen
Book_PenLv3

The storyline is good and intriguing!! The character design and environment description was well done. The only thing that I found a little comfortable was the flow. A proper flow wasn't maintained and there were few grammatical errors, which can be corrected by another read. The usage of '.......' can also be decreased. Apart from that, everything else about the novel is interesting. Keep Going!!

3yr
Akira_Monadelle
Akira_MonadelleLv13

This is a very good novel in terms of plot and creativity. The writer's intentions are clear and though vampire novels are insanely common and cliche it's admirable that the author managed to make their's unique. However, the novel is plagued by multiple errors. It started nicely but as I read on, few errors turned into multiple errors. There's not a lot if issues with grammar but some sentences lack end marks. The story lacked a proper flow and the writer went from scene to scene without any proper transitions. As a result, I was a bit confused while reading some paragraphs. Some things mentioned in the novel were a bit contradictory and it seemed as though the author was trying to pack multiple details in a single chapter. Overall, from the synopsis, it's clear this novel will be very interesting. It has a lot of potential but the author needs to work on the flow. All the best with your writing. [img=recommend]

3yr
Infinite888
Infinite888Lv4

Woah😍 I believe this will be a really Great book. The synopsis itself could catch attention to readers. What more could the content be😍 I recommend this everyone❤️❤️❤️❤️🤩🤩🤩

3yr
Professor_slaroM
Professor_slaroMLv2

Promising start to a vampire story, they say the older the wine the finer the taste, and this mistress is at least 100 years old! Love the world building so far, keep it up!

3yr
_Ram_
_Ram_Lv11

As per the adult tag only, I can definitely say that there are some steamy scenes in this novel. The progression is not that bad and not too draggy, from the moment she woke up to the point where she develop a secret relationship, there are many interesting scenes in between them. While this genre might be foreign to me, I can at least follow the story without being too disoriented. Good luck in your future endeavor author!

3yr
Jephthah_
Jephthah_Lv2

It's a good book, that's for sure, from the six chapters I've read, I can beat my chest and say it's a good book. Good grammar, nice concept, nice storyline. Keep it up.

3yr
authortinnnnn
authortinnnnnAuthor

Hi everyone!! I apologize for the grammar and everything else. I will fix it immediately. I hope you still give this book a second chance. Sincerely, authortinnnnn

3yr
Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

I am impressed with the author's narration quality. Even the language is a hard one, she managed to pull it off and it has quality at that. Surely, this will become great in the future. I am deeply rooting on our MC and her character is what I like. I hope I can write this fluent too. Keep it up, I support you [img=recommend]

3yr
BananaChicken
BananaChickenLv2

I'm still on the first five chapters and I can tell that this is a good book. It started off pretty fast and we experienced things the same way the main character does which is a really good thing as it makes an effect on its readers.

3yr
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