La historia promete pero el inicio es tan basura que no importa lo bueno que avanza la historia no la puedo ver bien y luego todo eso se descarta y se sigue como si nada, para que entiendas le da el tipico inicio de transmigrador que casi muere nomas spawnear con todo muy oscuro porque no sabe como desarroyar una historia de caracter serio sin darle algo tragico y oscuro que literal no aporta nada y viene sin aviso sinseramente todo el inicio oscuro no es necesario en una historia como rwby tenes cientos de formas de enemigos como grims que literal son mas coerentes para dar desarroyo podria decir mas pero creo que te haces una idea. No creo que cambie nada pero si te interesa comenta y tengo algunas ideas de como haces los primeros capitulos mas llevaderos sin que afecte demasiado a la historia y dar paso a oportinidades de desarroyo mas tarde. Suerte
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LIKEThe story promises but the beginning is so rubbish that no matter how good the story progresses, I can't see it well and then all that is discarded and it continues as if nothing, so you understand, it gives the typical start of a transmigrant that almost died. Spawning with everything very dark because he does not know how to develop a story of serious character without giving it something tragic and dark that literally does not add anything and comes without warning sinsemente all the dark beginning is not necessary in a story like rwby you have hundreds of forms of enemies like grims that literally are more coherent to give development I could say more but I think you get an idea. I don't think anything will change but if you are interested, comment and I have some ideas on how to make the first chapters more bearable without affecting the story too much and giving way to
Quade_The_Unknown:I can tell by the 2-star rating this person doesnt like my story. But I cant translate it. Can somebody translate it please?