Review Detail of Dayside in SUPREMACY IN MARVEL

Needs a lot of work in proper spacing, capital letters, and just altogether knowledge of a lot of different words. I'm probably not all that qualified to review it considering I only read 6 chapters but it just didn't look all that promising, the only thing I really liked is that he's Asgardian and that his wife will be Death. His wish is kinda dumb considering there's a ton of different ways to get telekinesis, it might not be as good as whatever 'Bob' will give but still. He probably should of asked for higher intelligence or something better in the long run. I doubt telekinesis will help much when you get to the level of conceptual beings like Death and so on. Good luck in your future endeavors and I hope this will be a learning experience.