Its still pretty early to write a full review, but so far its a pretty good revenge story. I would have preferred to start the actual story with him being a little older because having a child leading multiple adults in mafia style make it somewhat comical for me especially since his personality is childish too. My biggest worry is him visiting worlds and bringing a ton of characters "home". I would much prefer to have less characters and have more time with them, because with this pace after a few worlds it will be a challenge to remember all the characters for the readers and it feels really awkward too like Shiro getting that clingy with him with barely having any interaction. Besides Vergo (which was done pretty well) none of the characters really got enough screen-time and story with the mc to make for a good introduction in my opinion. Also its a common issue with this kind of fan-fictions to write with the viewpoint of somebody who have seen/read the original works, which can be expected normally but the story just started and we already got animes like no game no life, one piece, HxH included and eventually most readers will have a story arc where an anime is visited they didn't see. And especially the HxH arc would have been really confusing for somebody who didn't know the original. Finally the setting is really good, its rare to see a story well written from a completely different starting point with the story taking place so far in the underworld instead of the human world where the source anime starts with. So far it looks good and I'm looking forward how this story progress.
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Thanks i agree with most of what you said. I disagree with the shiro part since he had an arc with her. He litteraly helped her and made her depend on him. Shiro is a character who needs someone to lean to. The hxh part there is not much we can do. We can't write like 10 paragraphs explaining how nen works :(. I think we wrote it in a way that people will understand the basics even if they haven't watched the original. Either way they will not lose anything from watching the original it is a pretty good anime.
I guess fair points. I just prefer an overall slower story and more content with the "side" characters to give more weight to their loyalty, love, etc... On the HxH part its more of an unfortunate choice to have in an "anime multiverse" story considering how unique the setting and powers compared to something like a devil fruit which can be explained in a sentence. I just noticed it cuz it was years ago I watched the anime and I had to look up the wiki to get a full grasp of what happening, and that must be even worse for somebody who didn't see it at all. But this is more of a personal taste so I can understand your opinion too.
Bigsmartdumbdumb:Thanks i agree with most of what you said. I disagree with the shiro part since he had an arc with her. He litteraly helped her and made her depend on him. Shiro is a character who needs someone to lean to. The hxh part there is not much we can do. We can't write like 10 paragraphs explaining how nen works :(. I think we wrote it in a way that people will understand the basics even if they haven't watched the original. Either way they will not lose anything from watching the original it is a pretty good anime.
Well I feel sorry for the people who will read the next world. Considering it is kingdom building a lot of people will get lost. However me and the author do this for fun not for views. While I feel sorry for the people who havent watched hxh there is nothing we can do.
Gungnier:I guess fair points. I just prefer an overall slower story and more content with the "side" characters to give more weight to their loyalty, love, etc... On the HxH part its more of an unfortunate choice to have in an "anime multiverse" story considering how unique the setting and powers compared to something like a devil fruit which can be explained in a sentence. I just noticed it cuz it was years ago I watched the anime and I had to look up the wiki to get a full grasp of what happening, and that must be even worse for somebody who didn't see it at all. But this is more of a personal taste so I can understand your opinion too.
