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2021-03-23 00:01

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DreamWeaverWriting
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Damp_Towel
Damp_TowelLv10

Writing quality is good, sentences flow well together and creates a fluid scene. There spelling typos here and there that can be easily deciphered, no biggie. The story is going well, I really enjoy how in depth the author went into the alchomy system, could be a little confusing but very interesting to dive into, makes it seem real. The characters have some depth but from how far I'm at (chapter 64) there really isn't any major things that causes character development, the death of some minor side character hardly really impact the MC and the othercharacters. One thing I have to nitpick though the novel is a little too goody two shoes in my opinion. There is just not really any dark scenes that I would expect from a kingdom with slaves and exploitation. It happens but it's not gone into which makes it seem like a light hearted fantasy rather then a conquer the world/ kingdom building style. The MC is also kinda a Mary sue who strives for the wellbeing of his village and feels great sympathy to the oppressed people, nothing wrong with that, but I feel that pure mentality could become an obstacle in forming his own kingdom,when your are forced to make tough decisions. However, this is just the beginning and anything goes really. One more thing the characters and plots are also a little convenient. Everybody that are good is good, and we have this oppressive kingdom that basically is the epitome of evil. However even with this the author was able to give life to the characters by maintaining a unique personality and mission for each of them. Overall a great novel so far, will continue to read in anticipation, a little more light hearted then I expect (coming from city of sin, black iron glory, and ToRL) but the story has just begun and the novel have a lot of potential! Would recommend! 😁

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