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Kelator
KelatorLv12yr
2021-12-27 02:02

So it's obvious the author is just messing around so I'll give it the pro's and con's. pro - It's a reincarnated into a snake.. that's about it. - the action is ok. con - the grammar is horrible. - obvious rip off of chrysalis but much worse. - The way you announce the change to first and third person is annoying. - Even though it is a fantasy there should be at least some common sense logic. - The system and leveling lacks detail. - The story jumps very quickly into action before we can really even get a feel of what's happening. - Again things happen just to happen.. I'm pretty tired of the same "English is not my native language" then don't write in English lol. This story is all over the place and I've only gone through the first 10 chapters. The author is just writing on the fly instead of actually Mapping out the story. 2.5/5

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You are completely right. Just writing this for fun XD. It was (or maybe still is) just a thing for me to waste some time.

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