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Zenhood_Symphonity
Zenhood_SymphonityLv13yr
2021-10-06 18:40

I like OP characters but I can't stand 5 years old going to war and people just validating the whole thing, the fact that 12 years old were sent to be courrier in the manga was already on the nose but a 5 years old beingsent is just bad. I didn't want to read the story of a toddler, there should be some kind of tag for toddler stories, I want to read about guys that are tall and with muscles like dbz not some kid Dora the explorer going to war. The whole thing made me cringe by chapter 17 I had to leave it at that. It is far from the only story that is like this and most of it can be explained by the author being inexperienced and that's ok but very hard for me to read. I blame it all on the fact that litterature isn't visual and most author don't see the world and reality they are writing about, if the author had seen a little toddler giving orders to adults and going to war, maybe he wouldn't have written the story like this, who knows.

Reborn as strongest In Naruto world

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jonathan_galael
jonathan_galaelLv14

keep it up dude i like the story it just i hope harem one since i love haren hahaha dont judge me but ur story is good and hope he can kill danzo asap i hate that guy so MUCH...as ur other ff one piece hope can see soon man and hope OP like this also hahahaha i'm OP fans

4yr

Kilaske
KilaskeLv6

Reveal spoiler

4yr
DreamerTom
DreamerTomLv14

Love it so far, It's always good having OP Main Character with a little progress mentioned here and there. I like how you stole Rin from Obito, nobody does that nowadays. Reading experience wise, you need to fix the grammars and the pacing. Less update is good but make the chapter longer please. Overall i can't give it 5 stars but 4 is definitely appropriate.

4yr
DeidaraS_Dango
DeidaraS_DangoLv3

this has Very good potential i hope that he will eventually become a sensei ( because i have never read a novel with that in it if you have any sugestions please tell me ) but If not i hope that this wont be a harem

4yr
dev62490
dev62490Lv7

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Torrress
TorrressLv1

I dorpped at the 10 first chapters, there are alot of things that dont follow the logic of an adult inm any way, and its just cringe in somemoment how he acts as a kid.

3yr
LuminouShadow
LuminouShadowLv4

It's not a story for everyone. The only reason I am saying it is because the MC, is ridiculously OP and many people will fuss about it but well this is a fanfic about a senju with an uchiha father and the hime no Senju as a mother so deal with it. Other factor that might be hard for people to accept is Rin being a love interest and as of C40 the story was very in line with the actual history and that was satisfying with no weird character insert so the author definitely did his research for writing and it is very much appreciated. Other factors that I might say that I dont like is the author might change the genre to harem coz of some 'annoying msges' about Rin being a love interest. I mean come on dude... Rin is fine and watching Obito suffer can be a past time duh. So hopefully it will not be a harem label or atleast not one with more than 2 wives (please dont ruin the narutoverse love lines its beautiful to see everyone meets their spouses as time passes) thats all Thank you for the story its a good one and your writing style is comfortable to read. Might just want to add a little reminder on the POV change tho just a little suggestion. much love brother

3yr
ReyShii
ReyShiiLv5

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4yr
BookWizard23412
BookWizard23412Lv2

Frankly fan fiction not very. Everything is going too fast. There is simply no life in it, and as for me, if you do MS so OP, then this is by definition a solid prokhodnyak. Here you get the feeling that the author is running somewhere. And let's say a moment with Rin. Author you seem to position MS as a smart person. Who wants to be with a girl who just moves on to another guy. I'm silent about his wish it's a failure at all. He actually wants 2 times the same thing. In general. The author you have turned out so-so. As conclusion I'd say here is that this fan fiction from forces on 3. He absolutely lifeless.

3yr
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