Review Detail of Elojoy in I Fall For The Devil

The story is a little sweet although also cliche in the school genre. The characters are really clear in being either good or bad so they lack dimension but at the same time its easy to follow and who to root for but it makes me dislike the clearly bad guys. The only real problem I had was with the lack of interesting dialogue a lot of tell and no show and the only speaking wasnt very interesting and sounded more like expression of outward thought than conversation. However the writing itself is good and balances thoughts with events just not enough showing of action so right now feels like a lot of narration. This is me being nitpicky since I would have preferred more of a jump right into action than paragraph blocks for settings and current character situations but otherwise it's a pretty well written story!