Review Detail of q25t in Harry Potter and the Girl in Red

Honestly most of my issues with the book are in two categories: bad characterization and unrealistic worldbuilding. Pretty much every character in the novel has at least one or two mental breakdowns each year. Characters get immensely angry at each other for practically no reason basically every chapter. But by far the largest issue is how the book deals with murder. Almost all main characters treat murdering literally anyone as if it's literally the end of the world even if the victim is completely and utterly irredeemable. The worldbuilding is mainly a problem because this is fanfiction and there are some established facts. Wizarding England is not the sole wizarding community and it gets treated like it is even in scenarios where it ABSOLUTELY would not. Similarly the political structure within the British community is unbelievably mischaracterized. How things shake out in certain scenarios within the novel are so incredibly far-fetched as to be ridiculous. For last, there is one plot hole within the novel that it quite literally may be the size of the moon. For the first several years at Hogwarts, the threat to students and Rose's friends lives are what prevents Rose from taking action. Sylvia can just mess with people's memories to render it unnoticeable when people are at Hogwarts. So during the third year when quite literally everyone left the castle save Dumbledore why didn't Rose take action? Or during summers when students must leave and most professors do as well?