This is another review of mine, focusing more on criticism. this novel has 2 problem the first one is typos which is not really a problem because the author update everyday, which is tiring. the second one is the way it's written it could be better, in the first few chapters this was a problem but as story progress this become less a problem. But this is just a recommendation on how the author can improve his writing which works like this. Cao Cap: i Will destroy you liu bei for attacking my territory Liu Bei: Haha! go on and try cao cao! this is the day you fall! try doing this- Cao cao was angry and anxious of what's happening on his territory because of the sudden attack of liu bei causing him to be angry which result in continously screaming at liu bei, while liu bei simply taunt and with full confidence trimuphly think that this is the day his archenemy falls. As the story progress i noticed this happening which improved the story on another lvl but it would be appreciated if this type of writing become a norm and continue progressively, while i don't see any problem with the former the new way of writing cause its quality to improved.
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Thank you for the update review! I will try to change it but I can't promise because I am already comfortable with the way I write right now, but don't worry I will try to change it
Third person viewpoint is a great way of writing but i understand that its hard to implement, fiction is the most difficult to write, that's why i never want to be an author and if i was, i would choose non-fiction and not fictional books.
Tang12:Thank you for the update review! I will try to change it but I can't promise because I am already comfortable with the way I write right now, but don't worry I will try to change it
