Item: Saiyan System in the Immortal World
Rating: 5

MatrixshadoLv56yr

2018-06-16 07:04

Great start, love the progression not too fast or slow just right, great background of the world and characters so far. This so far is the best out of the series of saiyan originals it's not forced nor does it seem like a mix and match of varying ideas nice and smooth

Saiyan System in the Immortal World

kielreniel

4.1

40 Chs

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i'm not quite sure about this. he is a saiyan in a cultivation world, which is of course better than being a human and this is not what im concerned about, what i'm concerned about is that the mc is going to use mainly dbz skills, with his first goal being the kamehameha. the thing is that kamehameha and similar skills only work in the dbz universe. there is no way he can charge the kamehameha in the middle of the fight and the immortal cultivators are just going to watch it happen. even if he does fire it, its just too easy to dodge. another thing is that the dbz skills are very ****** skills, gather qi and shoot that stuff out in a straight line most of the time. they cant compare to the diverse skills of the cultivation world with barriers, formations... these are just my concerns regarding the future developement of the story. i'll see how the author plans to resolve these issues and edit my review again at chapter 50, if he gets that far.

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This sound interesting I hope for more updates 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄

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It has a really intresting story and title. I love these types of fanfics please dont drop it. It has awesome potential. Hope you also do daily uploads. Thanks

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