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elano77Lv125yr
2019-11-13 22:35

Where to start? This story is the perfect example of a good thing gone bad. The concept made sense but the execution was poor. Mc is not smart, he does not prioritize getting stronger. You know how there are MC's that try to create their own trump cards or develop their powerful skills?? This dude is nothing like that. He simply relies on his abilities as a parasite to see him through His character is inconsistent. Sometimes he is pointlessly wicked, sometimes he is pointlessly saintly. There is no criteria that links his different behaviours other than the fact that his treatment of a person usually vastly differs if they have a pvssy between their legs. I think the author was going for an anti-hero MC but failed miserably. He also lacks substance. He has no greater goal or objective outside of exploring and no greater motivation to explore. Despite his past experiences with betrayal, he falls in love within the first 20 chapters with someone he knows next to nothing about. Both factors make it very hard to care about him. There is no overarching theme holding his character together, no essence. Lith in Supreme Magus is a pessimistic psychopath who does not trust people because of past betrayals. Essence. Anthony in Chrysalis is a broken person who finds solace in an ant family and fights for its prosperity bc it gives him the warmth that a dysfunctional family and terrible childhood denied him. Essence. Even fvcking Goku from Dragon ball is a battle maniac who will stop at nothing to get stronger primarily bc nothing gets his wood harder in the morning than a brawl against a strong opponent. ESSENCE. This MC has NO essence whatsoever. Do not get me started on the side characters. Virtually all of them are fluff set pieces with no backstory or no motivation, simply there to help MC or advance the plotline. Most of the villains are the generic, cause-trouble-because-I-want-to, attack-MC-to-show-he-is-stronger types whose motivations and reasoning are unclear or not mentioned. I'm 85 chapters in and still can't tell you why villain A from 40 chapters ago did what he did. Then there's the repetition. The author tends to say the same thing in different ways in the same paragraph and then repeat that same thing in later chapters. You do not need a whole paragraph to say that a character is shy. And if she was shy 10 chapters ago, she's probably still shy this chapter. We get it. The world is developed to a small extent. Monster classes, dungeons, how skills develop, even how many moons there are in the fvcking sky, these things are not explained. We have to guess. The author also makes alot of spelling and grammatical errors, they really aren't bad enough for the novel to be unreadable and I don't think the author is a native English speaker so frankly it doesn't actually matter to me. Just thought it may be useful to know. Honestly, this whole novel reads like a first draft. The author clearly has talent and sensible ideas but his writing is very much immature. It feels like he didn't have an underlying plan for the MC's or story's development, didn't think too much about the depth of the characters either. I love novels with concepts like this one (skill and stat absorption, beast summoning, op mc, you know the works) which is why I toughed out 85 chapters but I do NOT recommend to anyone. I will drop it for now and if I ever pick it again, I'll review after I've read a bit more but so far, I haven't been satisfied much less impressed.

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Many really good points. Love the shout outs to chrysalis and supreme magus, great novels both. I felt it really did have something for a bit but every development just felt forced or messy.

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