I don't know why everyone else who gave a rating was so gentle with you and your story. If you have little true motivation, then being harsh will make you quit and try to find something you're truly interested in. It's also possible that you will take the criticism and come back stronger than you are now.
Your grammar and sentence structure are extremely poor. Your writing skills are so poor that every event that transpires in AEMW is bland, and the only thing I can do without receiving brain damage is glance over it all incredibly quickly.
The story itself is poor and most of it seems like copy pasta from other cultivation novels which are far superior in quality. The mc is copy pasta, the way he's OP is at least partly copy pasta, the human setting surrounding mc is most assuredly copy pasta.
I would say more but there isn't much of the story left, and the rest is assuredly poorly scrambled together as well.
If you're wondering why I'm so harsh in my review, (and my reviews in other places(sorry)), or if you're wondering how I can be so critical, it's ******.
I'm extremely critical of myself. That's it. When I write something, I become extremely critical of myself. I get very precise and excruciatingly cold with myself and the things I write. If even one sentence gives me a bad vibe I sit with it as long as I need to make it fit at least decently with the rest of the paragraph. I would never, ever let anything I write see the light of day if I thought that it might be even a quarter of the terror that AEMW is currently. Also, I proofread all my ****, because repeated readings can really help to iron out issues in grammar or sentence structure. Something really helpful is to read your work aloud, hearing what you write really helps dig out awkward phrases. And also, give your writings to:
1. A friend
2. An acquaintance
3. Someone who doesn't like you
Each one will catch different things, and if they catch the same things, you can be sure that the person who doesn't like you will tell you all about the issues in your writing. If you don't know who dislikes you, just get a second acquaintance, that's fine too. Also if you have teachers around, try and get English or Creative Writing teachers/professors to proofread as well. That is of course if the teachers/professors have the time or care to read the things you've written.
And listen, I know the pain of writing enough, but then getting told I should be more descriptive, it happens all the time for me. But that comment is probably one of the most helpful and motivating comments you can get from anyone. Just ask whoever it is to mark the exact places where they feel your writing could be deeper and more thorough, and soon, you'll have plenty to be working on.
(At least you have the courage to let your writings free, my writings are fine on grammar and sentence structure, I just don't let them out because they feel awkward, like something is missing from them. Everything might stay locked away in deep dark places forever, just because I don't like the way they feel.) OwO *Deep Dark Places* ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
