Guy_3972

I will just say 1 thing. Fanfics on this site seem to fail at being organic. What I mean is that no one, other than the main character, holds any agency to how the story evolves. How plot points are formulated. This writer understands that and understands that it goes even deeper than just having other characters influence the narrative. They understand that characters are driven by wants, needs, and motives. Each and every character is given at least a small humanising moment where the author explains why this or why that and what does that mean for the character. This small act is what gives life to the story. Aside from glazing, pls update more

Note: this is a retranslation or retread of an older ff. It is about Sakuno's brother and how he impacts Konoha

Your first point was saying "the author did a good job at removing chinese elements (I don't know if it is a translation)"? ... very curious start of a review

A surprisingly well written story. This is basically a "what if Peter Turbo had a real upbringing?" The only thing you should be wary of is the fact that it doesn't get updates.

I don't understand what others are seeing in this story beyond a surface level sense of hidden depth that doesn't actually exist. Actually ignore those fools. The story treats itself with an overwhelming sense of self importance. It is literally a story about genderbent primarchs, so treat it with the same fun energy. It is serious for no reason, and worse, doesn't even do the serious part well. For some reason we have a obviously self insert oc who is nicknamed "the enlightener"... This oc is the Emperor's first child, primarch zero (still the male noun even though she's female). And for some reason, the Empress is like "omg I made him in my exact image, he will have many of my strong traits and will be stronger, smarter, more cunning than his sisters. I love him!" which just ruins the tone of Warhammer. Additionally, Malcador names him "Adam Lampert". Are we serious? There is 9/10 chance of this being a self insert. The name "Adam" is fine as it draws roots from actually terran religion and makes sense from a world building perspective. However, "Lampert" is some weak name. Sorry for the Lamperts out there.

'NOT' gates? And, or, nand, xor

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Bro, it is literally just cute fem-kakashi instead of regular lakashi. No characters actually react in interesting ways, it jist feels bland

Immediate name issues. 2 character of same sex share a name.

Fugaku is literally the goat in this FF. He is not arrogant, he is clan head for selfless reasons (only because none could best him), willingly steps down cause he just wants out, continues to be a hands off checks and balances type of power in the Uchiha, hosts mc at his house for food, and double checks mc's actions with mc himself to ensure he has the clan's goals at the forefront. What in the Fugaku glaze is this.