Naigelton

The story has promise, but the writing is quite messy. It's frustrating when discussions interrupt sex scenes. Readers don't want to shift focus from an intense moment to a serious conversation, especially during intimate scenes, like the talk between Lavender and her mother. These conversations feel unnecessary and disrupt the flow. Instead, it would be better to write in more depth about what’s happening in the sex scene rather than inserting random topics for discussion. it takes away almost everything your trying to achive with the sex scene at all ... either focus on purley sexscene or just start skipping them , getting halfassed sex scenes with random topic inputs is fucking confusing to read about

to much highschool drama taste .. even among the grown ups jesus ...

seems intresting ! :)

yes so instead we give the power to silly few who can alter the world with a breath and some silly hand sign... and you know what its awesome they can just walk into any family they want and take what they want its super awesome you want a daughter go the the neigbour if you want a married wife go to the house nextdoor ! your free for all peasant world where ninjas can do whatever they want and those with money can just buy whatever they want... the system is so bad that author writing a bout it like its good kinda makes him out to be a bit retardy ^^

lol author ... are you prehaps a bit behind ... ? xD . the whole " ninja system is so bad that its sad "

nah... she became just a little older than a teenager

Sigh.. the propaganda is hardcore in this one

i dont understand at all ... is the mc adopted i dont understand how he fits into this whole picture at all .. why is he a china dude at all ? , make no sense