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hey mate, this is my review there are three points that I find problematic the first things the energy system is not explained at all We all know about the tree, the saplings and the tight but what does that mean give us guidelines or a basic building block for the energy system so we can build from there. My second issue is the flow of the story, the story doesn't hook you in the way it's supposed to, there's something missing when the story starts usually there's a mystery or a shocking event, it makes you want to know more but this story is flat and there's no application and flow to it. There's very weak, almost no world building and if there is world building it's completely confusing, I'm telling you the story has a lot of information missing. We don’t know what happened to the protagonist before he came to this world and we missed the protagonist after hit my transmigrated for awhile. I feel like the author wanted the story to be mysterious but it went down the wrong path and became very confusing for no good reason. The mystery is supposed to be knowledge or something that we or the protagonist themselves weren't supposed to know until later in the story there was a little bit of a hint here and there to guide you in the right direction but in this story even basic information is missing and that doesn't make a mystery, that makes confusion. this writing style will be good if this story is an offshoot of another story or even a fanfiction because he has the reader already know the fact the base the building block of the world itself but this is a new story, a new building and your giving us very small amount of basic knowledge and expect us to follow your ideas and don’t get confused or at least this is the conclusion I came up with after 25 chapters I don’t know if it will become better and more elaborate or I’m missing the explanation that’s supposed to come in the next five or maybe 10 chapters but I’m not going to pay for a story thet didn’t attract me and make me hooked in the first couple of chapters. One of my favourites author says if you want to write a story you have to focus on the three-point the beginning supposed to be shocking or mysterious to attract the reader the middle supposed to have a peak and a trough so the story don’t become flat or boring and the end, supposed to end with boom. the idea behind the story is good however the execution may need a little bit of tweaking and that’s all for me good luck in your endeavours

I don’t understand why does he not use the weapon? Because no matter what he practice it won’t equal to the power of a weapon.🤔

I’m not sure if I should give the story one star or reported since it’s copying from another novel the story is the exact same as the other story I know the only difference is the names of characters and some small touch here and there like what happened to the protagonist in the other story protagonist has no relation whatsoever with a character he reincarnate in to the name of that novel is (The Villain Wants to Live: by Jee Gab Song) this story is old I mean 4 to 6 years old you can search for it on Google and you can find a whole wiki about it.

Congratulation in advance I wish the best for you And can you tweak the talent concept Because I don’t want to read a whole story about the protagonist who only use fire spell.🤔

Just for the synopsis, I’ll give you five star you have encapsulated what a true wizard is like 👍.

Good story a complicated story but good nonetheless my biggest problem with the story is the flow of the story itself the author Continue to throw explanations in the middle of the conversation that interrupts the flow of the story and the explanation is very very long and it will break your concentration from the story and it is not an essential explanation. the author keeps throwing the history of the world, history of an item the reason behind a family nickname the history of a person like and dislike even the sexual orientation , etc to be honest. I rather his explanation to be dispersed through the story instead of concentrating when it come in a conversation all at once sometimes he throw the same explanation 2 to 3 times in different chapters and this is why I’m dropping this it become exhausting and annoying. I start to see myself skipping chunk of the chapter. Just to escape the explanation if I do that I rather not read the story at all.

Also, he’s Barbarian disguised as wizard short temper way to focus on the power of his physical body etc..

I'm quite sure I have read the story before maybe around 2 to 3 years ago. And I think I'm not sure, but I think he will kill his master after he tried to use him an experiment when he was at the peak of apprentice level.

Thanks mate I don’t mind if he can defend himself in close combat My problem is most of the time in other story of course you see the protagonist has powerful spells in his hand instead of using them he used an enhancing spell on himself and go fight like a barbarian and this is absolutely annoying. That’s why you see my frustration sipping out in the comments before any thank you but you’re honest. I think I will enjoy your story.🫡

Hey mate, can you give me a synopsis about the story and not introduction about the protagonist. (These days everyone is using the synopsis space for their own gibberish, some people writing the poem and other confession or to write introduction about protagonist where you are supposed to introduce him in the first chapters instead of the synopsis or even leaving their own feelings on the synopsis space And ignoring the story itself and the explanation of the world and Simple and general Information that is useful for me as a reader for example is the protagonist, male or female is a warrior a wizard a barbarian or warlock etc.. just give me a general information about the story itself to see if i want to read it or not)😓