belladoo

I’m just so glad that I found this after it’s completed because I would not be able to cope waiting for new chapters to be released 😅 Thank you sweet author for writing this phenomenal story. The plot is so good; better than some published works I’ve read recently!

Keep up the hard work! I’m a sucker for prophecy tropes, so looking forward to seeing where you take this 😊❤️

The main ideas of the plot are quite promising and the FMC seems interesting so far. The pace of plot progression is also good despite only 12 chapters currently available; I feel like quite a lot has happened already, but not in an overwhelming way. In terms of improvements: - Much more attention is needed when proofreading and editing. There are frequent spelling and grammar mistakes that take away from the quality of the story. Grammarly or chatGPT can help a lot! - If the step family will continue to be antagonists for the FMC, they’d benefit from a bit more fleshing out so that they’re not just cardboard characters. Things to consider: reasons for the rivalry between the twins, more on how step mum met FMC’s father, whether the normal servants are treated as badly as FMC, etc.