UnluckyLoveRomance

I am happy and surprised that you mentioned the Philippines in your first chapter 'coz I am from that county. I hope you put more emphasis on that county and explore more. I just have comment on the chapters' length, I can say that those are shorts and I highly suggest to make it at least 1,500 words per chapter so that you can get the right benefits once you sign an exclusive contract and premium contract.Lastly, the story concept is great. It is good to read and interesting to readers.

The storytelling is great. The drama is on and it gives interest to readers to continue reading to know what will happen next.

I read the first ten chapters and their scenes are okay, however the writing style especially on technicalities needs improvement.

The length of each chapter is fine, no worries.

The narrations are too lengthy. It's hard to read like I am like a walking ant. I also observed you put short dialogues. Dialogues make the story more lively and it makes the characters more alive.

I love how you deliver the story. The main character is okay, acted so natural and showcased the feelings.The only problem is you never mentioned what is the name of the character having a 1st Person POV. It disconnects a connection with the readers.

I love your narration style, a little bit long but not boring. The way the characters act are so natural, I can feel the drama and their connection.

I like the character of Darica. The scenes in the school are so reminiscent. The story development is smooth in transition. The connection between the characters is what I love the most. I can say that this novel is recommended.

Liked this kind of scene

Not so fast, my dear 😺