Real_Zooper

hnnnn this review system of this application is flawed , but story is amazing 🤩 you can improve as you overcome your weakness.

okay now time for review , well I saw some minor mistakes as read more and more , there are some grammatical mistakes and repeating phrases like he said he said , the. he then he like there are many other options also it feels like rushed in the end , as dog part is significantly small and there the word toss can be replace by something gentle it shows kindness of the mc , you can go deeper and deeper if you think about human thinking pattern btw good start.

same here sir[img=recommend]

waiting for the next chapter it's amazing as your first work, well it's quite ironic 💀 isn't it . keep it up

wait isn't gyome is stone hashira and wind hashira that is sanemi is dead(beheaded)

that's exactly what sanemi would say 🌚

amazing 🤩 waiting for more of this stuff

No next chapter only one 🌝