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TF? How tf did you reach this ch and ask this?
Nice story, the MC is good, it's not unlikable but the comment about Lin Qingzhu when he saw her it's not exactly my taste (Let's say). The arc of the tomb of the Nirvana Cultivator is going to decide if I like him or not (and if i'm going to continue the fic), because the MC knows what is going to happen in there and I wouldn't like him to take advantage of Lin Qingzhu /(It's my opinion). Besides that, the story has some original events and the MC takes the opportunuties of Lin Dong (Which I don't mind, and he should do it). Talking about the translation itself, it's good but there are errors, the more annoying ones are the name of the cultivation realms, some of them are translated wrong and it's confusing, the same with the name of aunt Ling, sometimes it's says her full name which is an error because she never said her full name (IDK if I'm remembering right, sometimes it's mentioned her full name or I'm confusing her with other character).
Te digo desde ya que eso no va a pasar.
Solo te puedo responder con un meme viejo: "eres un buen soñador, Max"
The main problem with your story is the same with the other fics of ATG. MC that dosen't struggle in the world and are flat in personality, unlike Yun Che, and if the authors want to make the story interesting, need to add harem. Which I don't mind, if it is well written, which in most cases, it's not. Like I said, the way you developed the relationship with Chu Yuechan is really good, and I was hoping that you would do the same with Qingyue and the rest. Unfortunately, it dosen't happen like that. Forget about the women not acting like they should do, the problem is the MC, he dosen't struggle, he wants a harem(which is a bit cringe) and be on the top of the world (Which I don't remember him saying that), but after that? He dosen't want anything else, his personality is flat and he is not interesting to me. And if you add the women falling for him with ease, well... I don't need to explain furthermore.
I have to make a proper review after seeing the shit reviews of the people, reviewing this stroy as a 5 strarts or 4. I am going to mention the main problems. First problem: the most important, and it is that this story has a huge plot hole, a HUGE ONE. Let's say that the author stated one thing in the story, and after some hundred chapters occours events that could not be possible because of the thing that the author stated before. It affects enourmously the story a lot and in my case I couldn't stop thinking about it while I read. Second problem: The MC it too powerful, this maked the author to cause the huge plot hole. From chapter 500 the MC was too powerful and this caused the story to develop in a way that caused the plot hole, specifically, it forms after chapter 900 if I remember. Third: The romance is shit, before chapter 800 the romance was really good, the best I've read, but after that, woman start falling in love with the MC because Why not?. It dosen't explain why, well, it does but the reasons are pretty bad and there is not development of the romance. Fourth problem: After chapter 900, in where the huge plot hole presents, the story is just bad, It's like the author didn't know where to head the story. Fifth: The author is not writing the story anymore.
Like always, you cooked. I hope you recover yo give your max!
He is not the author of the story, is the translator.
It has one of the greatest starts in a ATG fanfic that I ever read. But after chapter 33 it becomes the same shit of always in this kind of fics. Women that falls in love for no reason or for a demostration of power from part of the MC and the same thropes of this kind of fics. In the first 30 chaptes I thought that was going to be a really good romance with deveopment, because of the way it develops the relationship of Chu Yuechan but after that, the women characters like Qinyue and Cang Yue act out of character, falling in love with the MC for whatever reason that it dosen't explain. I have to say It has some original things and the comedy is really good, but besides that, it is not good for me.