Russian_Ace

yeah, spoke to the translator about cyberpsychosis theories for a bit you do realise this is a comment section on a novel though right? people tend to use it to leave comments. I'm sure like 90% of people using webnovel don't think the author is going to go and change what's already been written into a novel because it annoys people but would you rather I be one of those emoji spamming bots?

First line in the novel is the author telling people to leave if they have complaints. I'd recommend seeking professional help or atleast trying a little exposure therapy if things have gotten this bad for you, to the point you write a novel on a public website which has some of the most discussion opportunities of any online reading app. Either the author has such a severe fear of criticism that he had to spoil the literal first chapter of the book he put effort into writing just to try and alleviate some of that fear, or he's a narcissist with such a tremendous ego he believes that his work is utter perfection and the mere concept of criticism is such blasphemy he has to pre-emptively destroy any notion that he could make a mistake.

okay, came to see a halo fanfic and got told to fuck off before the first chapter even started. I'll go elsewhere then

"I'm going to a planet with alot of water, also my ship is fast" is what we got here

hmm... I haven't watched any star wars and we're already off to a bad start here. just having the mc show up in an entirely new galaxy and go "okay I'm going to hunt this species I've never heard of for the abilities I think they might have" isn't making me want to keep reading.

the fact he consistently says things out loud that could easily be thoughts he has in private is annoying, either he does that so someone can overhear him later which would be even more annoying or he does it just simply because the author doesn't know to use different punctuation for 'thoughts' instead of "spoken dialogue". also we don't know how long he lived as a predator so it's possible he still hasn't grown out of that 10-13 year old phase where he'd go around yelling everything like "OH MY GOD WE ARE ON THIS PLANET FROM STAR WARS!!!!!!!" and while that's technically a viable excuse, it's still a pretty cheap one. let's say he was 10 when he died in his first life, then lived one or two years as a predator before coming to star wars, he still should've developed enough in that time to grow out of the excited child phase. the only way you could justify the underdeveloped mc we have is if either of the two lives was cut down drastically, I put 10 years as a human because he'd have to get to atleast that age to have any substantial memories/awareness, any younger and he'd likely forget that he was a human at all before long and certainly wouldn't remember planet names from star wars. that means you'd have to cut down on the years in predator which hardly works either, let's say he only spent a few weeks in that galaxy before ending up here. that's not enough time to do much of anything, a 10 year old suddenly thrown into the body of some 9ft tall killing machine isn't going to be piloting around a spaceship in a week and calculating travel through a balckhole. tldr; the mc wasn't given an actual age or anything but we were shown through his general attitude/mentality that he'd at the very very most be a total of 13 years old combined between his two lives and that's pushing it.

the dialogue is written like he's a 9ft tall apex predator who sounds like a 13 year old who's at a theme park for the first time. it's fine if you want your character to be immature mentally and just have them think like a child but having them speak the childish way out loud is way more uncomfortable

oh alright, I was about to leave a review more or less the same as the one above about how after 5 years of the same mistakes being present nothing changed but if I've just gotta skip to chapter 20 then I'll try that

oh okay so the camera doesn't matter, the job is garbage, she's annoying and stupid, there is literally no reason to ever even consider this offer.

oh okay double fuck that, kill her ass. it was a bad enough offer beforehand but working as the assistant to some brain-dead woman at the DB? no I'd rather cut my own dick off than read this story if that's where it's going.