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Thanks! I will

I'm here to thank you again for your honest and very accurate review. Especially about the characters, I've been thinking, alot, about the way they acted and I realized they haven't really made actions that set them apart from other characters. The dialogue could really use some work, and I'd have to really establish their places in this fictional world. Again, thanks for the review. I wouldn't be able to realize this without your thoughts.

Thank you for your suggestions! I'll definitely keep them in mind moving forward.

Thanks for the suggestions, I'll try to rewrite some of them like you said.

Thanks for the review!

The world building is majectic. It's also very well written. I recommend this novel to people who likes to read action packed novels! Please support this author!

i love this [img=gift]

great action, again so well written[img=recommend]

I love the world and character description. But sometimes they are lengthy as not allowing any buildup of some kind in the story. But this is an introductory chapter and it's really written well [img=recommend]