DBSH

that was good, I actually have forgotten about these blades. cool

is it a translation and the pun got lost?

Hey, is it a translation or original? Cause looking on author's profile I have some doubts.

1. It's not as bad as it may seems because of comments 2. Mc makes odd decisions and quite passive 3. The world act weird (drug dealers are understanding and kind, while cops are stupid and evil and fierce with no reason) 4. From a moral perspective there are some really dubious moments Now let's move to plus, cause there are some: 1. Writing is good, and it's NOT AI 2. Mc personality is quite good too, not ideal, but at least he is good man with normal moral compass 3. I can see here normal power progression, but it's a very start of the story, so it may change later And I have nothing to add, cause chapters short, few actions and that's it. I'll wait for this story to grow, cause for me it's 4/5, better than average and I wanna read it full.

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Tftc, it's 278 PW

Ok with first, but why have you made second ability this op? I do not understand. Ok, he can't be erased with time shenanigans, it's ok. But immortal? Invincible? He cannot be even bothered with strong emotions. This suck on many levels. Invincible is cool cause while he is almost immortal, and durable as hell, he is still mortal, still can suffer from physical stuff and mental stuff (I'm talking about emotions, not telepathy), and this makes him someone alive. This piece of shit is just a paper, plastic Ken which will fulfill all your wishes with no effort. Such a waste...

😅, well, I can't help it feels kinda cringe to me. Especially, when people in sophisticated manner describe actions of psycho. There is a sense of exaltation in moments where it is inappropriate.

Exactly, 💯. I hate when mc out of nowhere get bunch of op skills and moreover - do nothing with it. I mean look at the plot, guy speak to bird, but a house and intrude girl's apartment. He can do all the same without telekinesis and shitty invisibility, which shouldn't work omo. I do not blame him for 🍇 starlight, but I haven't seen nothing good in book either. Good start with fish telepathy he ruined instantly. Telepathy not equal to telekinesis, and telekinesis is not equal to unlimited power and unbounded abilities. It's just ridiculous.

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