Kyu_To

Luffy's dream is to become a pirate king.

This is so stupid. The moment you appear the butterfly effect is already running. The world is only covering the missing patch that you've stolen.

just use Chu~. it's so weird. It's like Tsk and Chu combined.

"I apologize for interrupting but Miss Bell Mere we don't have time, You only have 5 minutes to exist before your soul will be sent back to the underworld. However, You don't need to worry, my skill can help you stay in this world a little longer. To do so, I need to bind you with an object. Right now, I cannot fully revive you yet but maybe in the future."

The "In front of you" is redundant and useless.

I would like to see Dreadnought in this world. That would be cool!

the last part is unnecessary and redundant.

bro you need an editor, it's really great and promising but man, It's hard to read.

me too, it's actually great with narcissistic MC who doesn't care about others opinions.

Nope, you just don't know how girls mind works. They are complicated individual, sometimes they would fall in love in a second or what we say love at first sight. Look at how women in our time? So many BOPS. For a woman like Nojiko who is desperate for freedom, only sadness every single day. what would you expect when a handsome man who gives her comfort and whispers sweet words? She would obviously jump into that pit of fire. Things like common sense, she would just throw that away.